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They Think That I Am Broken

 

 

I知 sitting here with walls of grey inside this tiny room
with just my thoughts of you to fill the day,
no sunshine comes to bathe my eyes or help to light the gloom
and they will never let me have a say.

They said that you were wrong for me and kept us far apart
and that was when my anger rose inside,
if only they had known how much you filled my aching heart
they may have killed our love, but not my pride.

They fill me full of pills and drugs to try and turn my mind,
electric therapy won稚 change a thing,
they think that I have altered  but they池e stupid, crass and blind.
for always in my heart I hear you sing.

So let the men who think they know correct me if they can
through pain and deprivation of my rights,
with spirit and my mind I will devise a cunning plan
the love inside I feel will reach new heights.

They think that I am broken but before long I値l be free
the scars that I have borne will slowly heal,
when the door is opened you値l be waiting there for me
your arms at last around me I will feel.

How warm the sun upon my skin, the brightness hurts my eyes
they take my arms to guide me through the door,
I see your face before me and inside me my love sighs
I知 not the girl you thought you knew before!

 

 

 

 

 

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The song is "Bright White Jackets" by April Smith.
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  • Mrs D
    December 30, 2008

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    great!!!

    absolutely beautifull....
    "no sunshine comes to bathe my eyes or help to light the gloom"

    love the imageryy here...and in the rest of the piece....

    good luck in the contest ......


  • Lanasaur
    December 30, 2008

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    amazing

    dat is such a great poem i can really image it like there is a moovie where this person knows loads of screts and they have to use loads of eletical things to get it out but he wont say anything anaway i love it so much espesially when it says "no sunshine to bathe my eyes" its great its wonderful.


  • Thomas Scott gold member
    October 17, 2008
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    Now, this is downright scary.
    Well done, Sue.
    And good luck in that contest.


  • AutumnsFlame
    October 15, 2008
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    Great! I think this poem reflects the song perfectly, and you really did an excellent job with it! Your imagery was good and you captured the tone that was in the song. I'm not so sure about the flow of the poem, but you did have some great imagery to make up for it. Thank you for entering my contest!


  • brittany.geeze
    October 15, 2008

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    They think that I am broken but before long I’ll be free
    the scars that I have borne will slowly heal,
    when the door is opened you’ll be waiting there for me
    your arms at last around me I will feel.
    --
    most amazing words by far!

    they look towards the future rather than dwelling on the present and past.

    good luck in the contest!


  • cricketjeff gold member
    October 14, 2008

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    Deep and painfully dark, in a flowing meter that seems to scream of tender love you give us the anguished and obsessive variety, and it works perfectly!

    Gret poetry poet.


  • silentheartbreak
    October 14, 2008
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    this is REALLY GOOD. Great job!


  • arafura gold member
    October 14, 2008
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    Powerful and confronting. Great writing.


  • Legend silver member
    October 14, 2008
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    Excellent

    Exceptional writing There is little to add that will add to this compliment so i won't try


  • Sunshine Always
    October 14, 2008

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    Very strong write Sue. I am at present working with autistic children....this excellent piece I can really relate to....Good luck...mal


  • Ceridwens Soul silver member
    October 14, 2008
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    Ouch Sis, this a brilliant write, so much pain, so much anguish, frustration and injustice.


  • Bambi Green
    October 14, 2008

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    Whew! Reminds me of a time I visited one of these places. As I watched the drooling and banging,jerky movements... it made me wonder "what goes on inside" (their minds)? Maybe inside it might be like you said and things aren't as bad as they look on the outside. Who knows?

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