I'm picking this book up again
Dusty and tattered
i thought it ended
At chapter fourteen
But it seems
There exists a twist
That gives this book a soul to live for
Now the blood
That once clothed my arms
Flows through my heart
For the first time, I breath
And they say it's cliche'
But I might as well die
If you walk out the door
As I live for you
This new breed of love
I can feel everywhere
As you're shaking
In discovery
I'm changing you
You're changing me
I'm something else
You're something more
The tears we cry,
We cry with smiles
It's the little things
That show we're in love
Know that I'm awake
Breathing your words
And speaking my thoughts
Know that I won't let go
And miles are miles
Distance won't
Keep us apart
Know that when my days end
You will never hear me say goodbye
For I will never leave the home
in your heart
Author notes
Definitely my favorite of all. Hope you likes it.
A contest entry
- Write Me To Tears by SilentMoonlight.
2700 points, ended November 3, 2008, 67 entries
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Comments
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beautiful. an excellant write full of beautiful if sublime imagery to tell a vivid story to your reader. you write of a beautiful truth. it is important, the little things you do for each other. well done, thank you for sharing this with me, and the best of luck in my compitition.
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Great *LOVE* dear ..and a' great poem too..' good luck ..!!
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Tender
your thoughts run deep as your
dedication to love. I like the loyalty
your words display. Love is so fleeting
these days because everyone dances
to their own beat. Its good to hear
the melody of someone elses heart
and dance in unity. Lovely piece
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Very well written and you are right the more I read the better it got. Nice write.
Thank you for your entry and good luck in the contest.
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Ah..this is just a beautiful piece coming directely from the heart of a poet bringing the depth and the beauty of the love through the poetic journey..well done...
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Know that when my days end
You will never hear me say goodbye
For I will never leave the home
in your heart
This is my favorite part ....Nice read ...Loved the flow of loved that is felt within such lines..Thank you for sharing this
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LOL why yes I do likes it
You had a bit of a shaky start but this got stronger and stronger as you went on. It was very touching and heartfelt. My favorite was this;
I'm changing you
You're changing me
I'm something else
You're something more
This calls out truth - everyone whos been in a relationship should be able to agree with me.
Great write thanks for entering! -
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I'm glad you noticed how shaky it was in the beginning. I wanted it to be, so it gives the reader the feel of how things were before I met her.
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Crying with a smile
Great line and a great upbeat poem about love. So nuce to so a happening ending and if that love has arrived hold on to it very tight. Nicely done poet.
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Very beautifully written
and a lovely thought here.
Thanks a lot for sharing this
one here and keep it up!
Jeremy0826
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