screaming echoes gripping the mind with each blow
internal eternal sentiments follow wherever I go
bags packed, cases latched, one final bitter glance
future dictates past, final opportunity and chance
risking support, following advice of heart’s choice
feelings rejoice, a new tomorrow to raise my voice
shoulders thrown back, confidence staying strong
staring shades into the glaring hate of another dawn
needing commitment to self, still answering to none
beginning anew, seeking forgiveness for things undone
heavy sigh, broken ties still holding soul with power
drizzling beginning, head hanging heavy in the shower
clothed-mind done stained, permanent remains pain
worthless to blame—smiles now hiding the shame
head on window, cool glass attempts ease heated crying
sweaty hands clenched on the last train to the horizon
A contest entry
- Off the Beaten Path by Shattered Remains.
600 points, ended October 17, 2008, 16 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
how bout it?
Comments
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clothed-mind done stained, permanent remains pain
worthless to blame—smiles now hiding the shame
I like these lines quite a bit, this is the type of rhyming I'm looking for, some people think it sounds forced, I don't, I think it's breaking away from conventional methods.. I liked your subject matter as well... Good Luck and thank you for entering..
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