Seems so long now,
all those years
so much heartache
brought flooding tears
perhaps it's true, we were too young
romantic notions never been flung.
But the song was played and children were born
you long gone but still loves dawn
as in 'my children'[s] 'faces .. show'
reflecting images
from long ago
Author notes
Great first contest Jade.. I loved your poem as the prompt, it certainly spoke to me although I could see how it would hurt to read, thankyou for sharing and also setting this up..
A contest entry
- Poem Prompt (my first contest) by jadeangyal.
1000 points, ended October 28, 2008, 8 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Oh my goodness - Amazing!
Words can't describe how deep that poem is! Emotion and emotion! . .
Don' ever stop writing! U
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dear Trill
that makes my heart sing
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Lib x x
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The sentiment stunned me! Beautiful, beautiful....
Smile♫
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I am so pleaseds that you enjoyed this
thankyou so muchs
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Lib x x
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Beautiful poem so full of wonderful imagery and emotions. I wish I could remember my childhood but maybe it is better that I don't. Thanks for sharing sis I so loved it. Good luck in the contest. Hugs Theresa
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My dear sweet Sister Theresa ~
as always a joy to hear from you
and for your beautiful comments
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ands sweet sis
Lib x x
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This is a very sweet poem that really conveys the emotion. Thank you for writing this. I would put "were born" on the previous line so that the rhyming words are at the end of the lines. Thank you for your submission.
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Thankyou so much Jade for your lovely words
I have altered the line
for the end rhyme
great prompt
Lib x x
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