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Thorny Path to Irkalla

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Hold me close for a little while,
Until I know what I’ve done wrong.
I’ve been forced into your shadows
And my stitching is tearing apart.

Invalid scars mark my Utopian body
Forever smearing my idyllic memories.
Hot liquid ash pours from my eyes,
Questioning my faith in destiny.

I can’t back away from this life yet,
It’s nurtured me like a flower at dawn.
Its message always lost along the way,
Damning me to eternal winter.

Idealistic ideals submerged inside my mind.
I’m unable to avoid the thorny road.
I never understand your haughty smiles
As you lead me down the garden path.

Twilight opens its illusive windows
Dragging us into Ereshkigal’s domain.
Judgments’ of Irkalla sapping my ability to live,
Tearing me from humanities fragile grasp.

 

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Author notes

For Claire's contest. Words used (in some form or another): 

~ Away, ~ breath, ~ Back, ~ Destiny, ~ forever, ~ flower, ~ Hold, ~ live , ~ mark, ~ message, ~ never, ~ new, ~ Question, ~ same, ~ Scar, ~ smile, ~ Twilight, ~ Waiting, ~ window, ~ Wrong.

 

 

 

This is a semi strange poem (even for me). It references Irkalla and Ereshkigal which are Mesopotamian myths.

Irkalla: "In Akkadian and Sumerian mythology, Irkalla (also Ir-Kalla, Irkalia) is the hell-like underworld from which there is no return." (Wikipedia).

Ereshkigal: "Great lady under earth was the goddess of Irkalla, the land of the dead or underworld.... Ereshkigal was the only one who could pass judgement and give laws in her kingdom." (Wikipedia).

Anyway - I didn't intend on writing about Hell when I started writing this, it evolved and apparently depicts the story of a person whose lover sends him/her to hell.

 

 

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  • Noir mariposa...x gold member
    October 30, 2008

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    "Twilight opens its illusive windows
    Dragging us into Ereshkigal’s domain.
    Judgments’ of Irkalla sapping my ability to live,
    Tearing me from humanities fragile grasp. "


    Oooo what an interesting read ^^
    Thanks for putting the definitions down the bottom

    I quite enjoyed the uniqueness of this; especially with the use of the wordbank; top points for that


    Thanks for entering ^^
    Claire x


  • Immortal Obscurity gold member
    October 19, 2008

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    This is a beautiful poem, sweetie... How I have missed your most-beautiful musings!

    This one reminded me a lot of "Sahara" by Nightwish. Don't know why; I guess it's just the odd mysticism within it. My favourite bit was this one:

    "It’s nurtured me like a flower at dawn.
    Its message always lost along the way,
    Damning me to eternal winter."

    The imagery here is amazing! Keep up the good work, and I'll be back

    Mummy still loves you


  • Girl With Guitar silver member
    October 15, 2008

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    People have such strength when it comes to sending their lovers to hell, even the metaphorical one. Even the weakest of bastards gain strength in that situation.

    I just am not sure on this: "Damning me to eternal winter." Eternal, like hell. Hell, not winter. Get me?
    Of course summer wouldn't be as effective because that's generally referred to as happy, and winter the opposite. Still.
    It's great everywhere else though bub. Best of luck in the contest.


    • Ravenblood
      October 15, 2008

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      Hey, thanks for the comment, I used the line "Damning me to enternal winter." because I don't generally think of hell as being all firey and hot and basically like an out of control sauna. I think Hell is more ice and cold because hell is the underworld and basically the epitome of evil. Generally people that are without emotions are thought of as cold and I think that hell is devoid of positive emotions and energy, which would make it a very cold, loveless, hell like place to be.

      Thanks for the comment though hunni. Loves


  • SmokinHotWhiteTiger
    October 14, 2008

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    Wow

    well shit blow me away with a shotgun and send me to damnation; this is one helluva impressive write from you sis. I just am lost for words at the incredible depth beauty and how you used the word bank beautifuly as I was saying im just in awe at your incredible write you have penned here. excellent flow beautiful workding and just incredible. keep up the good work and good luck in the contest. Me

    P.S. I agree with brother D this deserves gold
    * thinks the contest holder outta close the contest and hand you gold * LOL!


  • Dmonik
    October 14, 2008

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    Holy crap sis! This is deep and profound.
    This IS a rich writing vein. Each word had me mesmerized, wanting the next one..and when it ended..I read it again.
    Bravo, and Good Luck. This is deserving of Gold, imo.

    'D'


  • Lady Australis silver member
    October 14, 2008

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    this is an beautiful refleaction on how much you have elvoved as a writer sweet one and i think you did a very good job placeing the words into this poem as well as making the stranger words flow , giving the reader the issulion what they were from a differnt langage or even words that they ahve not heard before but should have
    much love to you and good luck

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