I watch the eagles fly
high up in the clear blue yonder
I wish I could follow
to dip and soar
to know true freedom.
But I am a land based
creature
destined to walk the earth
to never know what it is
to feel the wind beneath my wings.
I walk this earth
dreaming of flight
I walk wishing
to ride the wind.
But I wont.
Man may have never been meant to fly
but that doesn't mean I don't want to.
Author notes
If there's one thing I've always wanted to do it's to fly. Thought I might write about it. Hope you like.
A contest entry
- freeverse & prose [emotions attached] by xxRainbowDawnxx.
600 points, ended October 26, 2008, 35 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Beautiful imagery, I love birds in the sky,there's an elegance they have that us humans cannot master.
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Glad you like it...still hmm as a previous commenter said there is something not quite right about it.
Still glad i got my point across though.
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simple
too... it's not a poem. it's a paragraph broken up. rethink it. -
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Hmm I think I see what you mean. very well I'll have a think and see if I can't re-write it.
Thanks
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