Look out at the desolation
And know I am alone
There is no shelter
That can cover me
There are no arms
That can caress me
There are no words
That can comfort me
There is no substance
That can satiate me
There are no hands
That can hold mine
Author notes
i got the fifty words in one try, and I was very proud of myself, ^^
A contest entry
- Between by Pamela A Lamppa.
1750 points, ended October 28, 2008, 23 entries
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Comments
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Very deep
This is a good poem.
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This is such a sad and lonely poem and it touches on the given prompts nicely. I would have liked a little less listing and a bit more depth, but still, this is an enjoyable write for its simplicity.
Thank you for your fine entry to my contest. Best of luck in the judging. ~Pamela
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Strongly conveys the conviction that none
can comfort with either actions nor words.
Very bold display that sounds like a final cry.
Blue
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Empty...of everything...no solace...these feelings leap from the lines of this write!
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I know how you feel and hope you don't feel this way all the time. It's such a bleak expression of it.
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