a.
'Tis the ending of the day,
now the rosy sun descends.
Stars peek through the fading rays,
moonlight glows as daylight ends.
Yet we linger, loath to part;
less than lovers, more than friends.
b.
Birds nest silent in the trees,
sleepy as the darkness falls.
All of nature takes it's ease,
quieting the questing calls.
Shall I stay or shall I go?
Tell me yes or tell me no.
a.
Autumn turns the leaves to red,
soon the trees will gleam with frost.
On my shoulder rest your head,
let this moment not be lost.
Still we linger, loath to part;
less than lovers, tempest tossed.
b.
Chase the moon across the sky,
soon enough the sun will rise.
Ever constant, you and I,
gazing in each other's eyes.
Shall I stay or shall I go?
Tell me yes or tell me no.
a.
Writing words on shifting sands,
laughing as the river bends.
See the future's far-off lands,
tell me how the story ends.
Yet we linger, loath to part;
may two lovers still be friends?
b.
Shall I stay or shall I go?
Tell me yes or tell me no...
Author notes
An English Sestet
Thanks to:
Margaret Mead
Andrew Marvell
A contest entry
- Seashells by KevinDunn.
550 points, ended December 2, 2008, 35 entries
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Gold trophy winner
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Honorable mention
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Bronze trophy winner
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Comments
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I like the idea of this... As far as two lover staying friends... well a quote i read once said "If ex's can stay friends, they either still love each other or never loved each other at all" and that's always been true for me and my friends... something to think about i think...
Thanks so much for entering and good luck in the contest x -
I like the duet idea, it is something different and something I enjoy very much so, thank you for entering.
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Was this as relaxed in the writing as it is in the reading. Made all the more poignant by the duet. Well worth all the silverware.
See the future's far-off lands,
tell me how the story ends.
Yet we linger, loath to part;
may two lovers still be friends?
Don't know the answer to that but, strangely, I think I may find out soon.
G
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Dear M
I just want you to know how often I read this. I love it so very much. xx Chessie -
An elegant and effortless write! Well-deserving of the trophies! Seamless!
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Great format and well deserving of the trophies!
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Wow...speechless! every line was great!
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Brilliant! Honestly. The title of this caught my eye. I had a feeling this would be powerful, and I was right. The imagery, the rhyme, everything was perfect! Thank you for entering my contest, and I am bookmarking this poem! =)
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this is amazing, the flow is perfect and the repeat patterns are mastered by lyrical word plays. i cant pick a favorite stanza because they're all amazing and full of expression building back to the questions we face in that situation. awesome sestet, Shakespeare would be very proud
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This is utterly beautiful! Thanks for entering my contest! Good luck! I'm honored to have you show your work here!
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i love sestets, they are very elegant form. you did a very nice job. i personally don't write sestet cause i never felt like writing one.hehe
i loved how you formed it.. it is very smart and very nice way to write a sestet. the first line of every stanza expresses a time which is gonna pass and following line talks about the time which is gonna come and the next to lines talk the place in those two times you expressed earlier and finally the last two lines talks about the poet. but yeah except last three stanza you focused more on the subject thats how it suppose to. nicely done!!!
loved the imagery its not so vivid nor so blunt.. beautiful poetry. i could see the work you put in to this and i hope you took lots of time.
thanks for sharing such a beautiful write in my contest and best of luck
regards
abuyi
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This is close to perfection - and what nails it for me is the title - a duet.
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You select items around the love as still, or quietly observing yours, which is what this should be all about. I'm sure you'd want to be in that story rather than observing it.
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shivers
perfect loved it
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This undid me
'Less than lovers, more than friends'. Please pass me a hanky. I utterly love this and I choose 'writing words on shifting sands' as my favourite line for this read, which will be the first of many as I will bookmark this. You are a star. xx Debs
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So romantic and heart warming, reminds me so much of my partner and times alone we have together. Solitary.
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This is an interesting poem in its own right and I would like to have written it myself - but I can't see that it has anything to do with the contest.
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Beautiful
Love this...you really captured that sublime indecision when you're just not sure where it's all going.
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This is very beautiful. The images, the rhythms that alter with the focus, the rhyme and the sentiments expressed all combine in a seamless whole.
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Quite nice
Really lovely the way you weave this lover's tale. It all boils down to Y or N. =c
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This is very beautiful and appealing... it reminds me of that Richard Thompson song, "The Dimming of the Day."
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Ooh - nice to see another Richard Thompson listener on here. 'Cressida' is a favourite of mine. Trouble is, it makes my eyes water and my nose run. No, not attractive. x Chills
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I love it
The poem is beautiful in many ways, the sentiment, imagery, meter and rhyme. What I enjoyed most is observing the variation in refrains as the rhymes changed. This is skillful writing, a pleasure to read.
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