Who are you sweetie
Bury yourself down
Am I still breathing
I guess they thought you drown
Sink so deep
Lock your doors
We'll lay where impatients sleeps
But who will read what your criing for
Who are you sweetie
To young to be let down
To tired to be a child baby
Sleep tight in your white night gown
Sink so deep
Lock all your doors
We'll lay with impatients and fall asleep
Turn the lights off your voice is sore
Sweetie please talk to me
Your hiding in the dark
Deep down inside of my baby
Painting her with a mark
Who are you sweetie
Where would you like me to begin
When you arrive will you love me
I just wanna say I love my baby kaedyn
Author notes
i chose choice one.
This to my daughter Kaedyn Grace she's not born yet. Which is what its about. Dont ask where it inspired me it just triggered this whole thing lol. please enjoi and comment
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Comments
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this is okay. It could definitely use some tightening up, less repetition and more emotion.
You should fix your spelling for a start.
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Well... long time no talk....but hey thats cool. OMG you're gonna be a dad!! Must be exciting... I knew the feeling of expecting once but that jst turned tragic... but okay okay to the poem now.... I love it...it's very well wrote. keep writing.
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