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Left Behind



I stand on the shore
Watching as you sail
Toward the distant horizon.
Away from me,
Away from my heart,
Away from these arms of mine
That long to hold you once again.

Your ship but a silhouette
Against the maize and fire sky.
Reflection fractured by winds
Like a broken mirror,
Like my heart,
Like my shattered dreams
Of a wonderful life with you.

Oh to be one
With the seagulls in flight
Or the dolphins beside you.
Always following,
Always seeing,
Always with you
As you sail across the seas.




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  • transit
    February 4

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    ooo

    Thie poem reminded e of the olden-day love when it was as simple as seeing someone sail across the seas and yet feel a tugging in your heart. Great imagery! Good luck!

    ~transit~


    • Lionheart
      February 4
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      Thanks

      You are correct. This poem was written for another contest some time ago. It was a picture prompt of an old ship at sail.


  • wingsofgold25 silver member
    January 28

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    A very beautiful write although kinda sad.
    Its alwaws sad when someone you love is leaving
    Thank you for your entry and good luck in the contest.


  • marmac
    January 27

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    Great poem, but I'm really looking for something about a person returning, not departing.

    I thought your last stanza was so wonderful, probably the most creatively written. I love the idea of longing to be dolphins beside the person. It brings such an indirect and desparate relationship to mind. I didn't like parts of the first two stanzas though. I think it's because I've heard those descriptions many times before. You've written them well and are obviously a gifted poet, but have you considered editing them to contain more unique language? I guess that my suggestion is that I'd love to hear more of

    Your ship but a silhouette
    Against the maize and fire sky.
    Reflection fractured by winds

    and less of

    Like a broken mirror,
    Like my heart,
    Like my shattered dreams

    Anyway, great poem, I'd love to read other things from you!

    • Lionheart
      January 27
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      OK sorry

      I was thinking that since the person was hoping that the other would return, it would satisfy your prompt. Thank you for the applause and your kind words.
      Richard


  • xxRainbowDawnxx
    December 15, 2008

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    It hurts so much to watch someone go, especially if we fear they will not come back. I can pick this up in this write, maybe you know of it yourself personally.


  • catz Moderators member
    October 14, 2008

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    This is such a sad yet lovely poem, Richard You've expressed the feelings of heartbreak and love so well within the lines of this heartfelt piece.

    And it's great to see a new one drom you


    Dee

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