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to accomodate the lung


after much speculation,
the scientists believe
it really does take oxygen
to breathe.

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my bedroom had shelves all around the entire room, so when you got inside it, it started to feel smaller the longer you were in there.

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  • autarky
    December 30, 2008
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    i want a bedroom like that


  • divebar
    December 28, 2008
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    oh how i love finding new folks worth favoriting.


  • jaws theme song
    October 24, 2008

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    I think the part about you parents could either be elaborated on or not because it works as is, but the people who made you believe 'if i sink, you sink', those should def be elaborated.

  • likeforeignpost
    October 22, 2008
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    i haven't been outside much for a long time

    • outofsadness
      October 22, 2008
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      go outside, please. for at least an hour, just be out there. sit on your porch and fingerpaint. that's what i did today.

      • likeforeignpost
        October 24, 2008
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        i was outside and it started raining and i went in to get an umbrella and someone asked me why i was going inside and i explained to get an umbrella since it was raining and they asked, "why? you won't melt" and i said "that's true" so i'm not going to use umbrellas anymore


        • outofsadness
          October 24, 2008
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          an umbrella is just one more thing to divide people and nature. i like your decision.

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