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Carrion Hunter

 

On wings of poetry fly in summer sky,

on thermal wind you watch the world below,
your kingdom, clouds; you rule from there on high
Oh mighty emperor such grace bestow.

I sit and watch from farmer’s gate and smile,
when souls can soar, I’ll fly with you in dreams.
To feel the wind embrace my core awhile
as sun rays dance in shattered glassy streams.

Then diving down, a spiral descent to earth,
carrion hunter lands to feed on meat,
No waste to rot, the circle turns, rebirth,
as nature’s lore echoes in her heart beat.

Blessed Be!

Author notes

Based on the stunning photography of Necip Perver which can be found at http://photo.net/photodb/member-photos?user_id=4130063

Background: photography by Necip Perver

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  • The Poetic Angel
    October 27, 2008
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    Congrats on a very well deserved Gold Jems

    I'm so proud of You

    xxx Your angel xxx


  • cricketjeff gold member
    October 26, 2008

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    Stunning background and three terrific stanzas of poetry, although if I were being hyper-critical, and I am, the third stanza is the weakest of the three
    That said it is a superb poem and it carries off the gold. Congratulations I shall give the poem to Necip tomorrow.

  • The Poetic Angel
    October 19, 2008
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    butiful Jems

    xxx Your angel xxx

  • Judith Chandler
    October 14, 2008

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    You have got to respect those carrion hunters. I like the image of the poet looking up at the bird from the farmer's gate.


    • Ceridwens Soul silver member
      October 14, 2008
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      I was about 10 at the time, not sure it was a Kite but definitely a bird of prey


  • Sue Cardwell gold member
    October 14, 2008

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    Great poem alive with imagery, nature bought to life.

    Good luck in the contest...Sis

  • chiefmac
    October 14, 2008

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    Lovely rhyme as the flow moves smoothly between stanza. The reader is drawn into the wonder of flight and survival of nature. Small side note- yesterday a small hawk caught a squirrel in the neighbors yard and flew away with it. The face of nature alive. This is a wonderful work for nature.

    • Ceridwens Soul silver member
      October 14, 2008
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      Oh wow I bet that was awesome to see. Thank you for your comment, Chief

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