Ruptured eyes and laden tongues
fondle roving gaps of inattention
left seeping
through the missing pane
of hastily pried displeasure
veiled
amidst skin-deep folds
of barren hawthorns
stark against a lacquered sky
and conducive stains
whilst deciduous reason
was futilely seized
by an unspoken calm-
atop the cracking plaster...
Author notes
Image and quote are your prompts:
"The hand held between lonely"
Image Credit: Lonely Window by Chris Conrad 2003
A contest entry
- Between by Pamela A Lamppa.
1750 points, ended October 28, 2008, 23 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
Comments
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Your first two lines hit hard with strong verbiage that draws a reader; so appropriate for both the given image and word prompts in this contest. Thank you.
I liked "fondle roving gaps of inattention" particularly. This shows a nice use of language for the hard image you present.
"deciduous reason" is also an interesting line and I like it. This transit thought presents the impermanence of the moment and leaves one with the subtle hope that this too, shall pass.
I enjoyed this very much and thank you for such an expressive entry to my contest. Best of luck in the judging. ~Pamela
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Thank you for your kind words and I am glad my intentions were not overlooked.
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