I was trying to hold on to
my life
Using all my strength to
pull myself up
As i was slowly
fading away
The rail got slippry and
wet, so i was having trouble
holding on
At the sudden minute my
daughter came walking down
the stairs
I tryed with all my might
to grap her and tell her
that i love her and that i will never
go away again
I couldn't grab her so i
yelled out to her but
she couldn't hear me
I didn't know what was happening
to me
All i wanted to do was to talk to
my daughter again
What did you think
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WOW this is good tay
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oh wow. i thought about my hands slipping, as if i would disappear before getting to do the one thing i wanted to do.
this is really good. AWESOME.
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wow wut brought this on? are u speaking from the view of ur mom? its one of those scribes thats left wide open for all to see the emotion and other guts inside. good job here
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Quite sad
Only 13 and you already have a daughter, wow that's awesome! lol. Of cause I'm only messing with you. This poem is really good coming from a 13 year old, such great sadness I felt reading this poem. Well done.
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Relate
I enjoyed the vulnerability of this write.Always a good thing to keep hope alive when such a great loss has been felt.Well done
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This is greaat, it paints a clear pic but i would have preferred a better ending
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