Looking
up to the sky
for an answer to life
full of many prayers and dreams
picture of peacefulness
a basking glow
appeared
before me there
many answers revealed
like my answer now realized
was always inside me
I never knew
I could
depend upon
my own intuitions
to provide the answer for me
filled with accomplishment
from all I learned
today!
A contest entry
- Poetry Formed XXXVI - by Bear by Arkbear.
1000 points, ended October 19, 2008, 9 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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beautiful shape, and still makes perfect sense, good flow. Yes, i find it surprising when i can find answeres within myself as well.
congrats on the honeranle mention =]
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Hello
Simply gorgeous Presentation......thank you for taking this Form seriously.....truly an Artistic piece you have penned ~
I am not a fan of repeating words, such as *appeared*......sometimes it works, but not in such a short format as this.....no worries....not a huge deduction there ~
Caps are not used to slow or stop your Reader, as punctuation is not allowed in my Formed contests....only Caps, as this allows your Readers' brain to set their Tone & Flow ~
I adore this Theme.....pondering is the way to get my attention......I hope you join me in Poetry Formed XXXIX
God bless you!
Bear ~
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I appologize, I thought I had changed that second appeared to revealed. I guess when I went to edit it I messed up. I agree I don't like repeated use of words especially in such a short write. Still it was a great challenge. I don't believe I've ever tried it before. Thanks for the opportunity! Rose
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I appologize, I thought I had changed that second appeared to revealed. I guess when I went to edit it I messed up. I agree I don't like repeated use of words especially in such a short write. Still it was a great challenge. I don't believe I've ever tried it before. Thanks for the opportunity! Rose
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