with eyes shuttered
against the icy stares
which cool the warmest day
I search for sleep
to dull the lonely voices
for unconsciousness
to blur the edges
of your deception
but curtains of ennui
cannot hold back
the creeping chill
can love exist
between the layers
of fog and mist?
Author notes
Image Credit: Lonely Window by Chris Conrad 2003
50 words
A contest entry
- Between by Pamela A Lamppa.
1750 points, ended October 28, 2008, 23 entries
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Comments
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This question layers the loneliness to depths that make a reader take stock in self. Beautifully executed with wonderful line breaks for natural pauses.
I love the round corners of lower case letters used to smooth the sharp edges of lonely...
Yes, this is a stunner. Well done to both image and word prompts. I enjoyed this wonderful addition to my contest. Thank you for a splendid entry and best of luck in the judging. ~Pamela
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Beautiful poem full of misty images conveying loss, heartbreak, and searching for peace. How often I've experienced this.
Best of luck in this contest!
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The trouble with love among the fog and mist is we always seem to try to grasp the fog itself and not the emotions. Nice write C
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Saturated in layered meaning...
I really felt this one.
The questioning, but yet the
avoidance...both are evidenced
within a flowing display. Blue
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