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no ample amount of force fed
pills could make me love you
more or hate you less than the
emotions i have boiling over
right now.

they never seemed to change
your mind, just your attitude
so why shove them down your
throat; personal pleasure


at times it seems like the
anesthesiest has given in
and is tightly securing the
tubes with a cutthroat grip
[suffocate already]


it never was enough to see
you miserable, though it
seems watching you die without
a struggle seems to satisfy me
better than you ever could.

Author notes

the title to this is the same as a one-liner i did...and i enjoyed the title and the line so much that i decided to write about it.

i think it sucks...i havent been in the write state of mind at all

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  • NomDePlume silver member
    October 21, 2008

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    Very well done!

    Your persona of rejection coupled with the inability of medication to contain the emotional result brings home the truth of treating the symptoms when they never understand the cause...Bravo!


  • bananasfoster42
    October 16, 2008

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    for not being in a "write" state of mind i think you did a good job with this. thanks for the entry!


  • afroqban
    October 15, 2008

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    oh wow this is very different and i loved it. wasnt boring or the same ol stuff at all. awesome work


  • fairytalelovestory
    October 14, 2008
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    Ty for entering Good Luck.


  • Never Fall in Love
    October 13, 2008
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    good.


  • Curious LiLi
    October 13, 2008

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    I really liked this.
    The word choice was simple, but satisfying.
    The story was very much to my personal taste. :]

    All around, it's a great write!

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