Alone in the night
she cries
Cries because him
he lies
Lies so she doesn't find out
he cheats
Cheats because he never loved her
she laughs
Laughs because she always knew
She just wanted him to be happy
even if it had to be with someone else
Alone in the night
she cries
Author notes
"I'm a munchkin's apple pie yada dida oh-so-in-love-with-life!!"
A contest entry
- What Hurts The Most by charmander13.
525 points, ended October 19, 2008, 25 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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wow.... i thought that was amazingly good =)
it has kind of a mysteriousness to it... it made me sigh
bcuz i am in a similar situation to that of the girl in the poem (the awesome poem, i should say!
) this was very well written
nice job!!!! =)
hugs,
adria/ c-a
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Oh. This is a pretty crazy poem that you have going on here. I loved the moon border that you choose for it. It looks really nice with your poem. I was kind of confused because it seemed so contradictive because one minute she was crying and then she was laughing. But then she was crying again. I guess the girl in this poem was having a really hard time? I thought you did a good job of expressing yourself here.
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Very intense, lots of powerful imagery.
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Good job
I really like the line "Alone in the night
she cries" this is a really good poem expressing this kind of pain. Great job. -
Tres Bien!
Tres bien! I love it it is so sad and yet can pull at the strings in your mind; inspiring you and making you stare in awe at the talented writer.
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oh i loved it.. ive been in that situation before..
its so sad.. -
good
i.liked.it -
This is a really sad piece.. and the line,
"She just wanted him to be happy
even if it had to be with someone else" just struck me with its simplicity- strong and pure.
Well done!
Thank you for entering my contest and all the best to you!
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This is an awesome write there poet....I can so relate to this as of late.....
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