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Lost

The transparancy of life,
shatters before your eyes.
Rules and secrets
turned into backstabbing lies.
Every friend you had,
and every one you told,
Has turned their back on you,
and now your world is cold.
Its hard to breath
and its hard to except,
that everything that was yours
and everything that you kept
is gone.
Don't go out searching
for everything you lost,
because things will be uncovered
and you will realise
you were double crossed

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  • ZachP gold member
    October 18, 2008

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    This is a rather stark outlook on the picture, dear friend, I must admit. However, as verse goes, this is superbly done.

    Thank you for sharing, and good luck! God bless you in all your ways.