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The Coldest Sleep

Bang not the drum dry
Let it resonate with joy
Crisp and sharp with life
For I shall sleep now
Until again wakened
Refreshed from my slumber
And ready to stand again

So look upon me
with my eyes closed
and arms crossed
in peace kiss my cold cheek
and say goodnight
for I will see you again
in the dawns morning light

Author notes

this may seem strange but the coldest sleep refers to death. Bang not the drum dry, when people were burred drums were played with snare off but in hope there's some where to go I believe the drum should be played snare on, crisp and loud
Its a poem about death and the hope of going somewhere new, a rebirth.

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  • Kathleen a Nazarene
    11 hours ago
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    Bravo!

    Well, or course you believe in the Resurrection, right Paul? Sure seems like it from this write. That's what I see anyway. I really like this. We will all change & we will all be resurrected....some to eternal life & some will be exterminated in a flash! I'm aiming for Eternity.


  • Rose Angel gold member
    July 2, 2009
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    Well...a write of good night and good morning...quite delightful....

  • magnusprime1
    April 5, 2009

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    not quite sure what it is about... but i like how the words flow....and i find your work to be very descriptive! well done


  • Lencio Rodrigues
    October 14, 2008

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    Very good!

    writing poetry again? I didnt know you were so good!!! This is so good! was it what you dreamt in your sleep and then wrote it or something? No wonder we are twins! Loved this Paul, really a great write from you and sometimes i wish I could write like you.

    Great one!

    Love and light,
    Lencio

  • The Rainbows Mind
    October 13, 2008

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    Putting something so simple in to a poetic form.
    Good job man, saw you had a new one and I had to read it. Yeah, I guess this ain't much of a comment, but the poem was good.

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