I'm not wrong
To ask you to back away from me
It's not new
And it's not me
It's you
You asked to hold me just one last time
A question I can't answer
Not tonight
Still you wait with a crooked smile
The same arrogance I hated for so long
The reason I can't stand the thought
Of spending forever with you
You are still waiting
Standing by the window
Your body a sillouhette
In front of a twilight background
Emphasizing the scar on my heart
That you have created over the years
I'm not wrong
To ask you to back away from me
It's not new
And it's not me
It's you
You left a mark inside
Like the bruises you left on my arms
I am but a wilting flower
And all because of you
I cannot live like this much longer
Must you pull me back in?
I never expected you to return
Claiming to be a better man
Can I truly trust you?
You are still waiting
The same arrogance playing upon your lips
Your body a sillouhette
In front of a twilight background
Emphasizing the scar on my heart
Matching the ones on my wrists
All caused from what you have done to me
I'm not wrong
To ask you to back away from me
It's not a new thought
And it's not me
It's you
Then why am I confused?
Author notes
I really enjoyed this one. It was easy to use way more than 5 words. You really had a good choice. You can make a lot out of this!
A contest entry
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"I'm not wrong
To ask you to back away from me
It's not a new thought
And it's not me
It's you
Then why am I confused?"
I know that feeling all to well, a very well played question
I quite liked this, especially the repetition ^^
Thanks for entering
Claire x
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yay!
very enjoyable read friend, and a good write... -
Is this about who I think it is it's a wonderful write honestly and I agree with Ravenblood on the spelling Love you sis
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no it's not about anyone, actually
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Wow, that was a really wonderful poem. I think the word your after is silhouette. It's a fiendish word, isn't it?
But it's a really really really great poem and good luck in the contest.
Claire-Anne
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Holy crap! this is amazing!I can relate tot his on so many levels its like you wrote it for me. Very wonderful work
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very nice. It is written sort of like a song. The repeated words actually work for me. And I also like the background in which you use. Adds to it.
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