autumn day-
to wisp of wind
he chases …his hat
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A contest entry
- Fall into Haiku by azure85.
600 points, ended October 29, 2008, 41 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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autumn day-
to wisp of wind
he chases …his hat
Oh, a delightful AHA moment in L3! A great look at something we see, and you captured it so well in your haiku. Thank you so much.
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roflmao @ the ending of this write. I could eaisly envision this write and it also reminded me when my father & I ( oneof the rare times we got along ) he took me fishing at a locla lake and lmao I did catch a fish that day but a huge wind gust took his hat and roflmao its at the bottom of the lake now destroyed probably now after 13 years of submersion. any ways I just was instantly swept back to that memory thanks to that end of your Haiku. beautiful work and good luck in the contest
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nice switch shown
the beginning verse lends opportunity for imagination over an average occurence of the season, so colorful leaves come to mind. next of breeze set me to the scene of watching a leaf slip from a branch. but aha, the 'wisp' hit the whisp, bared of coverage. hay thrown per se gets stronger to hey, resonatinngly for maybe no so prepared head with forecast and specific described speeds picking up. underestimated in capsized transition to winter ~
excellent diagonally lengthened text for the double pleasure of followig this ~
charming for more stimulus than just raking swirls,
call me Carolyn -
...playful!
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Excellent choice of words. I feel the wisp of wind, and see the man chasing his hat.
Good luck in this contest!
Jeannette
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