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self

silence is a home
for the soul

a cabin
on a mountain
gathered in the palm

of natures symphony


simple

a day in the city
is a carousel
conversations swirling
taxis horns cursing, hurry!

poison

hot-dogs

funnel cakes
cigarette smoke
fill each breath

 

the electricity, the hustle
pounds like percussion
demanding, march!


miles away from silence
we starve and grieve

the anguish remains
until we walk the path
back to our cabin

light a fire
just to watch it burn

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  • Rick Weston silver member
    November 2
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    a wonderfully illustrated contrast. i guess i chose the silence and the fire.

    well done.


  • Purple Eyes
    September 16

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    I like this

    sometimes its the moments of quite that bring us our greatest sence of being

    i like this alot

    *smiles*


  • white stone
    September 14

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    I like this. Sensory perceptions of the outside world swirl around the cabin like a hurricane around its eye. Easily discernable meaning. Dig it.


  • Mr.
    September 14
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    I really enjoyed this.


  • individuality gold member
    September 11

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    a good piece of poetry which you have presented here, ah silence, i ahte it at times, i mostly have the tv on in the background, and when friends call music is played, but sometimes i like to sit with no sound. i like the fairground imagery here with hotdogs and such too, to show the fast paced madness life can be.


  • SummerlandRayne gold member
    February 25
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    AHHHH...yes Sweet Girl...

    Everything about this reminds me of perfect comfort!


  • jazzcat gold member
    December 6, 2008

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    I love the way you paint a picture with your words and take the reader along with you. The last two stanzas are my favorite, but there is so much to this to love. It is peaceful and comforting, romantic and sensual, it is what a poem is supposed to be.

  • icebear
    November 30, 2008
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    as if I was there

    yes, the peace of solitude.


  • Mark Rickerby gold member
    November 30, 2008

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    Yes! Celebrating the simple is one of the surest paths to peace. The need for constant entertainment becomes an addiction until we forget how to be alone and enjoy silence. Music is the space between the notes, too. Nicely done.

    Mark


  • Endeavor gold member
    October 20, 2008

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    Very Good

    the ache
    remains
    until we walk the path
    back to our cabin

    light a fire
    just to watch it burn

    All the lines support the wonderful ending
    I wish I could find this style in me

    Just lovely

    Rick


  • PrabhuDayal Khattar silver member
    October 19, 2008

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    Yes..I do agree that the solitude itself is a situation out of control..despite many efforts are done..if the heart is aching then it is a difficult display of the destiny bringing the muse in neautral ..a great poem indeed..


  • Fritz O skennick gold member
    October 17, 2008

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    Intelligent & thought provoking!!!

    Great stuff!!!
    Great narrative rhythm & flow & so beautifully crafted as to keep me enthralled throughout...
    Keep up the good work...
    Well done!!!


  • Manoj Sanyal
    October 16, 2008

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    nice poem with embedded philosophy.
    Thanks for your participation.
    Good luck,


  • Loveandblessings2u gold member
    October 13, 2008

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    Hi Friend,
    I love this piece,
    not only for its beauty,
    but because you wrote it,
    and I happen to just love
    everything you write.
    Honestly I do, LoL.
    This is a very comfortable, warm and relaxing
    piece to come home to. Living in a very busy
    city, I need a path to a cozy cabin, believe me.
    Very enjoyable to read.
    Thanks, you made me dream for a moment.

    Loveandblessings2u & yours always
    Love Ya,
    Joyce


    • michellemybelle gold member
      October 13, 2008
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      thank you my sweet friend! I love everything you write also, and your comments always feel like a warm embrace.
      love and s
      Michelle


  • justgot2loveme
    October 13, 2008

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    This is very cozy and warm.
    Touches the heart and caresses the soul.
    Soft and gentle, makes one long for home,
    even if their only gone for a few hours.
    I enjoyed this piece a lot.

    Justgot2loveme

    • michellemybelle gold member
      October 13, 2008
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      Thank you, glad you found warm feelings in these words.
      blessings,
      Michelle


  • storiesuntold gold member
    October 13, 2008

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    Good write here

    Penned very well and the touch of the wings within each of our hearts often shared with gentle words we give and often leave behind


  • LadyUnique silver member
    October 13, 2008

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    there's a soothing quality to your words that can't be missed. good comparison of peace of mind and turmoil too. i enjoyed this


  • artis
    October 13, 2008

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    Soundproof my soul sits, nestled in the cage of my ribs, locked in the cells of my brain, longing to fly free,

    waiting till I weary of the noise, the blah blah blah of candidates, the obvious ploys of candid dates, the drip, drip, drip of the faucet in the wee hours, the world rushing by, til I flee for the sanctuary of it's quiet repose. Then the poetry flows to tweak the silence into breaths between lines. Lovely write Michelle, and that new picture of you takes my breath
    away completely like a shop vac, and makes me long for Alabama, southern hospitality, and the nectar of dew on two lips.~~Artis


    • michellemybelle gold member
      October 13, 2008
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      Thank you Artis, your comments are always poetry. I don't believe I have never been told my pic was as breathtaking as a shop vac...lol
      thanks again.
      Michelle


  • Soft-Rain gold member
    October 13, 2008

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    The journey to silence can be wonderful. Self finding the inner peace no matter where we are in life.
    May your life be blessed with escapes into silence...

    Hugs
    ~Lisa~


  • cbsbecm88
    October 13, 2008
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    i like this because it wasvery descriptive and true! i just really liked it!


  • Moonlightdragon gold member
    October 13, 2008

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    so very true

    each time i read your work i am taken with the simple beauty of your thoughts and words. So finely crafted

    Love and light
    Robert


    • michellemybelle gold member
      October 13, 2008
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      Thank you Robert, what a wonderful compliment! I say the same to you.
      blessings,
      Michelle


  • honorable mention
    October 13, 2008

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    how bout the two of us escape to the cabins this weekend? lol awesome poem here michelle


  • StarEyes
    October 13, 2008

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    Sis,

    How true your words! Thsi is fantastic! Now maybe that is why I am a country girl! Even though I was raised in the city, give me the country... Much calmer and more relaxing! Great job!

    and love

    Nyetta


    • michellemybelle gold member
      October 13, 2008
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      Thanks Sis! Silence is so precious! I have been thinking about you. Keep me posted!
      love and sss
      Michelle


  • trekkergirl
    October 13, 2008

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    oooohhhhh now I really like this one. It tells me that while people enjoy the commotion of city life we need once in a while go to a quiet place and re-charge our batteries. This is a great write and I really do enjoy it.


    • michellemybelle gold member
      October 13, 2008
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      Thank you so much, glad you liked this. It is important we pause.
      blessings,
      Michelle


  • SummerlandRayne gold member
    October 13, 2008

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    So peaceful and comforting Sis...loved the sights, smells and sounds portrayed in this verse. A delight to all the senses. Such a unique style you have my friend...always a sheer pleasure to read you!!!

    Love You~
    Sue


    • michellemybelle gold member
      October 13, 2008
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      thank you sis. I am reading a new book, I need to send you one, it is very healing.
      love you


  • melphleg gold member
    October 13, 2008

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    Oh I so agree. We need silence to renew our souls. I experienced this just this weekend. Since is a Spiritual practice we all need! Beautiful poem. Once again I relate to your words. You speak to my soul, Michelle.


    • michellemybelle gold member
      October 13, 2008
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      Hi my friend. I am so glad you experienced this weekend, I did as well. It is necessary to inner peace and our spirituality.
      blessings,
      Michelle

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