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A Widow and Her Memories

 

 

 

A whispered summer breeze

caught a lock

of frail gray hair

 

as laughter of children

echoed

in her mind

 

they were grown

he

was gone

 

although

still in her heart

like a song.

 

A waltz by moonlight

once reflected

on red silk

 

now, coal black

is her color

of choice.

 

 

 

Author notes

Prompt: "The hand held between lonely"
50 words.

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  • Pamela A Lamppa silver member
    October 27, 2008

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    Mourning that continues whether official or not holds the memories of love - the hand held between lonely. I am moved and touched by this piece. Choice lines and phrases:

    - A waltz by moonlight once reflected on red silk -
    Such a vibrant visual with this.

    Wonderful poetry and reads the prompts beautifully. Thank you for such a splendid entry. Best of luck in the judging. ~Pamela


  • motel silver member
    October 24, 2008

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    the middle part of the piece really struck me :

    "... they were grown
    he
    was gone

    although
    still in her heart
    like a song. ..."

    wonderful. good luck in the contest and thanks.


  • Dalaney gold member
    October 20, 2008

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    you sent me your comment just as i got to your page! I guess we knew where we were going this morning

    "although still in her heart like a song..." sigh. I love this line. Lane


  • Margaret Denham gold member
    October 15, 2008

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    So many images from so few words. You took my breath away with the impact of the emotions you showed here dear.

    Best wishes in the contest for such a superb poem.

    Love Margaret


  • Bad Bill
    October 15, 2008

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    Excellent. You have the rare ability to paint a full picture using the minimum of brushstrokes.

    Best of luck,
    Bill

  • tara wilson gold member
    October 14, 2008
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    love this one...

  • Judith Chandler
    October 14, 2008
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    It's sparse but that appeals to me. You have said a lot in a few words.


  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    October 14, 2008

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    So sad.. she is alone, but has her memories to comfort her. Another stunner!


  • Blue Rew silver member
    October 13, 2008

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    These few words have real impact.
    I marvelled at the use of colour
    and movement throughout to convey
    further meaning. Blue


  • September Daydreams
    October 13, 2008
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    I think it's great piece of work.Good imagery and great use of a symbolic language .

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