What hides behind the waterfall,
I’ve asked myself this day-
Could it be the endless hours borne
of senseless grieving gray?
Could it be my heart still mourns
for those loved souls who’ve left the ground-
that streaks the cheeks so silently
when there’s no one else around?
Would it be to simply turn the clock
and watch as hands retrace
in backward strokes so quickly
for the years it must erase.
If only warmth of summer’s breath
waived sultry on the hour-
Instead of autumn’s painted lips
which kiss with vibrant power.
But dreadful drifts of time's demise
do naught but cloud the view,
and I in stillness lift my head
just wondering anew--
What hides behind the waterfall?
Author notes
Sorry, I've not done a more creative form- not written anything rhyming in over a year, but I hope the alliteration and rhyme will make up for it's lack of a better form 
In a list
A contest entry
- Form Poetry Celebration #131 by Lyndon.
3000 points, ended October 27, 2008, 9 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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I like the imagery you have here, and the rhyming worked well. Congrats on the honorable mention, I imagine if the contest was not focusing on form you would have placed even higher.
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Hi Topnotchsy
thank you for popping in to view my scribbles and for leaving your great thoughts and encouragement behind, I truly appreciate it
I was very honored to receive an HM it's the first piece I'd written in over a year
and was happy for the inspiration to write.
Have a wonderful day and let the ink flow!
blessings Sandi
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The waterfall of our grief is a very powerful expression and healer. The "if onlys" are very poignant and I'm sure we've all felt this at one time or another. Thank you for your entry. Peace, Liz
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Excellent
Sandi for far to long you have been away
What a joy it was to see you posting once more and to note that you have not lost any of the wonderful use of the English language
I love every single word of this one The rhyme and flow is no lest than i expect from your pen alway perfection to this readers eyes
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Oh, it so so nice to see you back with your poetry my dear friend. I see that you use some nice pictures in this poem, and idea was great.
~Sonja~
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I loved the flow of this write, and if it bears no standard "form", it is still a lovely poem. Thank you for your entry.
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