Sometimes I say, "I am going to be,
what I was not previously"
Acquire the universe
Completely....
Log on to the router of reality
Until I can see with God Vision,
and thats God with a big G
How anything is possible,
still amazes me....
Reaching out to the,
super unknown
Blindly...
Lifted a stone
Split some wood
Doing whatever Mary would
In the darkness I have stood
My light has clustered galaxies
and participated in countless tragedies
Harboring secrets and
speaking lies as,
daft fools,
and the wisest of the wise
Once upon a lifetime
I drank moonshine,
and drifted out at sea
Endlessly...
I've been busy feeding needs,
and gathering hungry greeds
Paying fines and
collecting taxes
Holographicaly haunting the ages,
of what we loosely call history
Bleeding through the passages,
of reality
Sometimes I say, "I am going to be,
what I was not previously"
Know the unknown
Completely....
Tap into the collective
The passive and the active
See without perspective
Twirl my lines through the spiral of time
Personify the divine and,
transform our design
To what do I owe,
this great pleasure!
To dine with you dear,
the all encompassing element,
that leaves us all here
Stammering, alone...
yet so near
Guiding us with God Vision,
Feel the intrinsic precision,
creating chaos and grace
Bringing to fruition...
Light, Love and Inner/Outer-space
Author notes
BG art by me.
A contest entry
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Amazing
The graphic nature of it blinded me. I didnt even want to understand it it just grabbed me and took me for a ride. Thanks for the thoughts and words.
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Love the background imagery; I see that you've noted that you did it yoruself, it's quite wonderful, so well done on that!
As for this; at the start, I wasn't too sure about it, but it did grow on me as the poem moved on throughout, certainly not criticism here, you had some wonderful imagery - and the wording was spot on, I feel.
Favourite section, was,
"I've been busy feeding needs,
and gathering hungry greeds
Paying fines and
collecting taxes
Holographicaly haunting the ages,
of what we loosely call history
Bleeding through the passages,
of reality"
For it sums up life so loosely, yet so true; and rather scary to think about! Thanksf or entering
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wonderful poem
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this is an amazing poem, you dont need to advertise it because it is so brillaint, and i loved the last line, i thought that was so original, brillaint !! i look forward to seeing what ya think of mine :]
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Everything that is outside,
resides inside,
we take it out of ourselves
and placed it among the stars.
Love brings us to the light
and beyond.
The outer perimeters
are just the beginning of space
where Gods vision resides.
The universe enters us,
and we project it back
as God.
Wow....if ever a piece had me thinking ...
it was this one lass.
This was an attempt to untangle our convoluted understanding of our existence in the universe.
You should really be here in N.Y.....
I do believe your talent would be recognized if you just got any of this in print in even the smallest publications.
Outstanding..
at this point I would be disappointed if it were otherwise.
Now...I dont want anyone to steal this idea ...
so i want to tell you off of your work...
It was something that I was definitely going to do ...
but it was tailor made for you...and I mean it.
As i found out more ...as I read of it...
I thought of you....I think you will love it.
It's a subject matter...a name...
if you are not aware after I tell you...goggle it or I can tell you were to get facts about it......
IT IS A PERFECT SUBJECT MATTER FOR YOU!
If you are interested...
let me know...
if ya want to pass on it ...
thats cool...
I will attempt it...
but it is made for you...
it is you!
Contact me....
no problem if I tell you and your not interested...
I will give it a bloody go then...
but I really think it's yours....
I say this because of brilliant works such as this.
Much love
little gypsy,
Liam
[lowell]
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Again your artwork is outstanding. I like to think this poem is dedicated to the possibility's of the one conciseness. I have long felt and used the universe to feed me appropriate persona or emotion to help me out in sticky situations. I still don't know how it works. You seem to be aware and part of this collective, yet in awe of it's magnitude. You can feel the effects of your light but the responsibility of others may not be yours, even if it is visible to you. I am stuck on the third thru sixth lines of the second stanza, are you referencing Mary Magdalene? And how does the stone and wood fit in? Again an easy and wonderful read. It seems your talent is limitless. Thank you for sharing.
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First off, thank you for the comment. The stone and wood does reference the Magdalene in that "split a piece of wood and you will fide me, lift a stone and I am there" is a reference to a supposed unreleased gospel of Jesus.
Thanks again
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Oh, this is GREAT! Every stanza merits a second and third read, and then some quiet contemplation. What is this eternal itch we have that leans us, leads us to strive for the God-vision, to link to the cosmos in some way? You have captured this so well... my personal belief has something to do with the essence of energy from my dying molecules floating in space until I once again meet up with the atoms of my beloved, where we will dance together throughout the universe, and visit all the stars and planets I have only seen in my mind's eye. Bookmarked for sure!
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I suppose it would be cliché to say that I loved every word or syllable, but that doesn't negate the truthfulness of the feeling. The words would look good/sound great in Notepad, but the picture that you have accompanying the poem is absolutely perfect as well. A great write, a great background... too bad you don't earn a little mula with this one in some sort of contest. Best to you!
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wow--lovely
i enjoyed your words and rhythm. cosmic, hopeful, sensitive. thank you.
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Exactly why your on my favorites looove your flow and the rhyme scheme.
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This was very profound, lots of thoughts going on here, I enjoyed reading it very much. One small typo 'culstered galaxies'. Beautiful piece of penmanship, keep it up!
Kat
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Wow, this was an amazing poem! The flow was just as beautiful as the language. Great background too. Great job.
Tal.
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Beautiful .Great rhyme .
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