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Uncaged { Gold }

Deeply ingrained,

course reality shatter inwards,

uncovering silent speech,

to a voice listened in poetry,

pressed keys, my release.

 

Blue bruising purples the pain,

hidden from view,

shrouds the injustice,

in clever hands that handle the punch,

secretly unveiled.

 

Raw honestly fed the lies,

swallowed whole.

 

Picture faceless,

expression false,

shard mirror spliced,

for it was he who rolled the dice.

 

Fleeting moments,

Dance the spirit of heart,

opening bolted locks,

skeleton keys turning,

viewing reflections of a double life.

 

Calmness,

silent cries mimic once was,

their freedom,

trust earned in gentle touch,

my escape from caged aggression,

I turned to them, they knew....

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  • Paloszoo gold member
    October 25, 2008
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    Oh yeah........

  • Paloszoo gold member
    October 25, 2008

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    This is beautiful! Spectacular! Thanks so much for entering my contest. I’m honored to have you show your work here.


    • Reptile Lady gold member
      October 26, 2008
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      thank you so much for the Gold and for hosting this wonderful prompt
      xx


  • KayJay
    October 22, 2008

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    You had me from the first words... a truely engrossing write that pulls you along. Powerful, filled with emotion, it shows the depth of your talent against the frailty of the heart... Bravo!
    Ken


  • daviscth silver member
    October 20, 2008

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    WowSis, this was a heart-stopping poem!! Just the type that I enjoy reading from you. Good luck in the contest.


  • whitexrose39
    October 18, 2008

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    This was extremely intense!! Sadly, I can relate. Thankfully, I can relate to all of it. Turning away is such a hard thing.

  • Bob Fox
    October 14, 2008
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    Hard times

    Hard times and the want for peace and understanding. But the knuckles need no futrther bruising.


  • Abe 1
    October 14, 2008

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    kewl title
    just looked on de page of this luvly lady
    wowza me lady dis poem is fab
    dark thoughts i can read and de luvly ending
    gd luck 2 ya
    abe


  • storiesuntold gold member
    October 13, 2008

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    Oh what a poem this is

    You have penned a true winner here honey I could almost feel her plite and then as she turned in findsing her love and to show her loved ones a look that said I am home I am loved at last it was awesome


  • Midnite wolf gold member
    October 13, 2008

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    wow, that was intense, the imagery was so powerful, really dunno what else i can say hun, i'm speechless, (for once) good luck in the contest. take care, x x x


  • Fritz O skennick gold member
    October 13, 2008

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    Wow!!! Love this...

    The flow, fantastic... The pace, urgent... The imagery, wonderful...
    Read it twice to fully digest its essence...
    Another outstanding write...
    Well Done!!!


  • Sweet Impatience gold member
    October 13, 2008

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    WOW! Mum the imagery throught out this poem is birlliant and very vivid. Oustanding job with this. these emotions are something that I've felt before. though not recently, but still have felt them.. the first two stanzas are quite dark and the imagery just reaches out and hits one quite hard. but at the same time it hits deep. the being fed the lies, oh the memories that line alone has brought forth.

    the part about it was he that rolled the dice, I can pick out a time in my past that I can say yes I had a man do exactly that. 

    as I read through this I must say this.. have you been hiding in my head for awhile or what? this poem hit home and in a place that had been worked through but will never be forgotten. can't forgot about it, why.. so it won't ever happen again.. I looked at the prompt and said omg I've felt just like and it wasn't that long ago either.

    I'll never foget where I've been or where I came from.. that would be like forgetting who I am..

     

     

    good luck Mum in the contest

     

    kat


  • maralisa silver member
    October 13, 2008

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    aw julie your poem is brilliant the imagery is raw and the emotions deep good luck in the contest my friend take care marina


  • LadyDementia gold member
    October 13, 2008

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    Wow, some fantastic word play here hun. I especially like 'Blue bruising purples the pain,' portrays awesome if somewhat painful imagery. A superbly penned write, good luck in your contest


  • chilali
    October 13, 2008
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    Ooh! I forgot to mention how I loved your take on the picture! I would have never been able to come up with a poem like that for that picture. Your mind soul and heart; truly brilliant full of amazing creativity and imagination!

  • chilali
    October 13, 2008

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    Wow! Incredible choice of words in this piece. I must say! The imager and the flow is just waaayyy too beautiful for me to describe. I loved every bit of it, but for some reason, this line --> "Blue bruising purples the pain" just hit the strongest. I loved it. Omg! Just beautiful. I cannot stop reading that one line. Well done and good luck to you in the contest

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