Outside my window the world seems the same,
it doesn’t reflect what inside me has gone wrong,
sitting and waiting at twilight
when I last saw her,
looking for a message of rekindled fire
in reply to the ones I’ve sent
that never comes no matter how often I write.
Just wanting to see that envelope arrive
marked by her handwriting,
bringing some new breath of hope my despair,
over how she’ll come back,
constantly remembering the night she went away,
each day spent asking the same question
how long can I hold on and live
without a chance to touch her hand
or feel the joy from seeing her smile?
The scar upon my mind
from watching
as the wilted flower of our love
appeared in her eyes,
it still brings the pain to my thoughts,
over how we felt destiny
had sealed our lives as one,
forever,
words failing in the growing distance
to undo the gulf in our longing.
But now my soul lingers in the ebbing light
ever praying my last song of impassioned plea
written from my ink well of sorrow,
that it will sing its melody into her heart
and be a serenade that returns her to me,
ever gazing for that precious view
of her appearing again on the walkway
where I lost the goddess
I thought would always be mine.
Author notes
I used all 20 words
away
breath
back
destiny
forever
flower
hold live
mark
message
never
new
question
same
scar smile
twilight
waiting window
wrong
A contest entry
- -- Word Bank -- by Noir mariposa...x.
550 points, ended November 1, 2008, 17 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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"where I lost the goddess
I thought would always be mine."
How beautifully sad
When I came up with the words I didn't know how people would use them, and I never would've thought such a poem could've been made out of them
This is simply gorgeous ^^
Thank you very much for entering,
I wish you the very best of luck
Claire x
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Beautifully done. I think you used the wordbank to create an especially touching poem.
Great job.
Mike
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A depiction of life as it to often is. Well penned and best to you in contest...
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This story unfolded so sadly, yet you did such a beautiful job with it! So full of emotion and vivid imagery! Impressive!
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so sad, full of emotion,
But now my soul lingers in the ebbing light
ever praying my last song of impassioned plea
written from my ink well of sorrow,
that it will sing its melody into her heart
and be a serenade that returns her to me,
another excellent write, good luck in the contest. -
wow this is sooooo good. I feel your loss your sorrow your pain at being separated with your love. You did this well.
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Ahhh...this is so sad and has so much emotion. I love this and I always love the way you write. Good luck in the contest
The scar upon my mind
from watching
as the wilted flower of our love
appeared in her eyes,
it still brings the pain to my thoughts,
over how we felt destiny
had sealed our lives as one,
forever,
words failing in the growing distance
to undo the gulf in our longing.
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