Inconsiderate?
I can tell you all about it--
typing at my virus ridden dell
as she sleeps right behind me
tossing away from the monitor’s leer
She wont speak a word
only complaining in sheet snatching
she’s mute from guilt
you should see the zippers
She never thought I
would inspect the cause of it all
What cause you ask...
~Lets say bumps~
Lets say painful knots grew on you
but where?
In the place you hide
from God under the covers
This woman, your wife
children and a vow
You work hard
you pay bills
~But she’s bored~
Not enough attention
the fedex man delivers...
~More than you think~
Now we take medicine
and our skin reeks of her promiscuity
But I’m wrong if I throw it back
her face raw from pointed fingers
~But I’m wrong!~
So like any hopeless romantic
I stay and write this poem
Wishing I had the balls of my Father
to beat the living shit out of her
A contest entry
- Blow me away (points bonanza) by Zero the Hero.
1750 points, ended October 14, 2008, 11 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Deepest Secrets REAVELED! by Sick Sunshine.
1000 points, ended October 28, 2008, 20 entries
Bronze trophy winner
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deepest secret indeed revealed.. good write. it's better to live lonely than to live a fool.
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ouch very profound and led to the unexpected well done
thank you
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I love when poets take suggestive conversation and create scenes such as this! Everything was vividly written! I sat in the audience and watched. There was no instance in which I wanted to turn away or break for the sponsors. Brilliant! The last line was unexpected. I look for that in good poetry! Thanks for the surprise that interlocks with the title.
Fierce!
Much Love & Respect ♥
Renee
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u betta get a female 2 WHOOP DAT ASSS! i feel 4 u
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hey lady where u been! thanks for checkin this out, and no worries, this isnt something that happen to me lol. sometimes people tell me things and i try to write about it
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bloody hell. I am a bit gob smacked at where this went, and yet I feel like I've been told a private fear and wish all rolled into one; the imagery here is awesome,
As she sleeps right behind me
tossing away from the monitor’s leer
I can see it, a whole world of doubts condensed to two people harbouring different levels of guilt-shared and yet unspoken.
good luck with this write.
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thank u much. im glad u enjoyed it, it was fun to write as well. thanks again
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