Past is a time that shall not be forgotten
Millions over millions of depressing stories come from this era
It’s nearly impossible to let them go
Anger that is no longer part of my outward appearance
Something that can never be shown
Is lurking in me
Ready to come out in tears or furious rage
I am afraid to let the anger out
For something that has been locked away
Must never escape
And every bit of memory of the antagonizing past
Feeds it
Adding to its inevitable attack
The tortured soul will keep feeding until it has the strength to break free
In whatever form it may take
I don’t want it to get it
For once it’s out I won’t be able to control it
The anger of the beast could cause a meltdown on its outward shell
Which I hate to say is me
Or that tortured soul could reach out in a furious rage
Causing the shell to act in ways that may hurt himself or others near him
Eventually my only way to silence the beast is to take the empty heartless shell
Slide the crushing power of the rope around its neck
And wait for the black spots to fill its vision
Author notes
this poem all came from one key word " past" and it can keep me going... writing ... so dont give up... if i can get something out just think what u can do.... hope u enjoy it
A contest entry
- round one; your best prewrite. by August Starlight.
765 points, ended March 21, 93 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - From within my solitude... by Lilian of Tilburg.
900 points, ended April 10, 28 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
what do u think..be honest cause i cant write
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your use of words in this poem is very good. you have articulated your thoughts with a violent imagery that captures the attention
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Wow, there is a lot of held-in anger here. I loved they way you write, and your meter is amazingly intact. Very talented write here. But...However much I loved this, I feel that in this write there is no hope or inspiration found here for you to carry on by finding the answers from within yourself. My point really is, that even if you are alone, you can be more than fine, and be really strong, and you can find that strength in your own solitude...
I have learned that forgiveness brings healing... by not letting go of past hurt and nasty lessons learned, you will never be free
Thanks you so much for sharing the marvelous write!
lilian
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This is really good.
The words you used conveyed the anger well.
Thanks for entering and good luck. -
Once again... amazing
like it's already been said before the poem was filled with this potent sense of anger that comes from the things in the past... I mean I felt this was for a while... not being able to accept some of the things I had done... but like you said the keyword is past... it's already been done and can't be fixed... so we must learn to accept the choice we made and move forward... we can't just keep holding back all our anger and deciding it's better that way because it's not... it's better to talk about something or let it out here... like me lol anyway beautiful, and compelling... I also agree... you can write fabulous poems and I'm not the only one who recognizes it... so keep up the great work!!!!
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I love how this poem expresses your anger so powerfully. quit putting that you cant write cause you have alot of talent, plus even if it wasnt good(which it is) your poems are from your heart and thats what makes a good poet, so yeah you are awsome ^.^
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The anger in this piece is overwhelming, and so is the meaning of the whole poem. I agree with the person below me though, I do think you should talk to someone, but hey, who am I to advise?
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woot... dude, you so gotta let all that anger out. you can't keep it contained in yourself forever. you so gotta talk about it, there's definitely a way to fix whats making you upset. this was such an angry piece... it was so mad and filled with such frustration. keep writing alright, and pls do talk to someone about your problems... because if you keep it all to yourself, you might just BURST one day.
keep the faith alive buddy.
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