chestnut leaves join hands
ring around the cobblestones
scuffle like children
Author notes
chestnut leaves are shaped like hands
A contest entry
- Fall into Haiku by azure85.
600 points, ended October 29, 2008, 41 entries
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This is an enchanting scene from a windy Fall day ~ the autumn leaves, like children's hands joining in play and dancing on the cobblestones. Very lovely! Thank you for your entry.
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how do the leaves join hands? a bit too much metaphor for my mind's eye... perhaps stick to the leaves == children argument and expand the image-story from there.
leaves like children
dancing around the cobblestones
falling into a pile
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Beautiful words.
I loved the poetic devices used here.
Leaves playing like children is really wonderful imagination.
All the best.
-Swati
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for a moment...
I smile
childlike
Mal
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Such a splendid write. I could see this in my mind. Awesome for three short lines.
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Interesting
a fascinating write this haiku is. I could envision all of this taking place with little kids jumping into piles of leaves that the adults just created. I remember doing that myself quite often and oh how the good times roll. any ways just a very well balanced well penned poem and enjoyed it. keep up the good work
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chestnut leaves join hands
ring around the cobblestones
scuffle like children
This brings out the joy of the season, with the swirl of leaves and happiness of youth. A delightful haiku, thank you so much.
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...a joy!
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Beautiful
Succinct and utterly charming
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Another good verse.
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Cool haiku (nice background).
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