Stop taking our voices -our freedom- our reasons to live - and imprisoning us in invisible cages where everything we do isn't good enough and putting out our fires of strength and tomorrow so all we have to come back to is you.
Good girls go bad but all you have is yourselves to blame!
A contest entry
- Stories- SHORT!!! sweet, and to the point... by worshipchick.
760 points, ended October 28, 2008, 16 entries
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Comments
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Starts off very strong, but I'm not sure I know what your point is by the end. I think you could split it up into more sentences and still keep it within the word limit. In fact, periods will eliminate the word "and". :-) Great imagery and emotion though, and I like the concept a lot. Thanks for entering!
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