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His

He took.
She gave.


Forever his.



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  • myrataal silver member
    October 30, 2008

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    Wondrous how these few words ...

    stirred the entire Universe ...

    Version 2

    she gave
    he took

    forever hers


  • Malabu
    October 13, 2008
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    an all to familiar epilog...