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Long Past The Garden Of Eden.

 

 

 

 

The limbs of
mankind are fragile,
they have taken many
leaves throughout history,
leaves of their senses,
that shook the very roots
of civilizations growth.

The tree of life
is a weeping willow,
quite fragile yet we form
an umbrella for all of
the lesser creatures
beneath us.

It is graceful
but has bent in agony,
when mushrooms twice
tore at the very core
of its existence.
Nagasaki, Hiroshima.

Gardens of ash still lie
buried under the regrowth
that took years to achieve.

Hitler was a mad pruner,
destroying whole branches
and tiny buds to create his
insane view of a perfect landscape.

Genghis Khan another toxic invader,
hordes of men swarmed like aphids,
devouring all of the flourishing
life in their paths.

We must strive to prevent,
the pre-emptive cuttings
of our many branches,
the controlled burnings,
the axing of
inquisitive growth.

Our tree of life is
scarred and split,
in many places,
we grow feeble
from pollutants,
and many offshoots
are barren.

Let us study such
pictures as this,
lest what spreads under
the clear blue skies,
is not new life,
but mushrooms
extinguishing
all that we
have ever known.

 

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  • dove94
    October 13, 2008
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    wow
    your continued metaphors were spot on.
    very powerful
    =]

  • jadeangyal
    October 13, 2008

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    This was very insightful. Your metaphors are very effective, eg:
    "the pre-emptive cuttings
    of our many branches,
    the controlled burnings,
    the axing of
    inquisitive growth."
    I like how you have compared all humankind to one tree. Very cool.


  • HereComesTheSun
    October 13, 2008

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    amazing

    this poem was a fantastic read start to finish i mean the way it just came to life the events you wrote and the message so clear and true
    wonderful work


  • trekkergirl
    October 13, 2008

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    I love the pictures that you chose. You gave some interesting ones from the tree of life. I also find that I really like this poem. It flows very well.


  • hawkeslake gold member
    October 13, 2008

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    The last stanza is a beautiful invitation to be mindful, as Buddhists might suggest, and we should study both the pictures, and the trees outside our windows. They are quite literally our life sustainers, as well as figuratively, and we take so little care... excellent reminder never to allow pruning by any leaders before time. Worth a second and third read!


  • lunarlunacy
    October 13, 2008

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    What an amazing pic and poem to follow. So many travesties do we commit in this so called "civil"ized extistence. It is quite amamzing how such advanced animals can act so brutaly ignorant at times; from Hiroshima to the Holy Crusades and soo much more. Three of those little yellow clapping smiley dudes. Kudos!


  • Twinstar
    October 13, 2008

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    A very powerful poem, and an important message. Very well crafted.

    Good luck in the contest!

    Love & light
    Debbera


  • georgie
    October 13, 2008
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    intense... as always. a very good message,
    hugs,
    georgie,
    xxx


  • Crashing-89
    October 13, 2008

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    Very well written, and I like the historical references and the matching picture. Deep, & thought provoking. Kudos!

    Keep writing!


  • FaerieNWonderland
    October 13, 2008
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    loved the whole thing. very well written.


  • Snowing Kisses gold member
    October 13, 2008

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    WOW VERY PROLIFIC AND POIGNANT, VERY NICE RHYTHM THROUGHOUT, REALLY MADE ME STOP AND THINK TERRIFIC IMAGRY AND A VERY VERY THOUGHT PROVOKING LAST VERSE NICE WRITE THANKS FOR SHARING LITTLEFISHONE


  • secberm
    October 13, 2008

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    Love the references made here. Nagasaki, Hiroshima, megalomaniacs, prevention... I'll revisit to read the changes. Write on.

    Dez


  • frownsnfreckles
    October 13, 2008

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    The first two verses could stand alone, as the clarity of the message stands strong within a simplicity of poignant and revealing personification enhanced by the clever use of double entendre. Well done, thoughtful and thought provoking.

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