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Hearts Aren't Allowed

And why did you flush that lovely shade of crimson whenever I addressed you?
And why did your perfectly crooked teeth show behind your smile whenever you spoke my name?
And why did you linger for minutes that seemed like hours when I only asked you for change?
If you didn't love me, you shouldn't have shown it.

And why did you take the long way home if not to see me?
And why did you brush my shoulder ever so lightly with you fingertips every time you passed?
And why did you lean in and whisper in my ear, tickling my cheek with your breath, to ask the smallest of favors?
If you didn't love me, you shouldn't have shown it.

And why did you look away whenever I mad eye contact to hide your staring?
And why did your life story float on the smoke as it curled past your lips?  I didn't ask.
And why did you talk about me to Felicia and anyone else who would listen?
If you didn't love me, you shouldn't have shown it.

    And why didn't you make mention of your girlfriend sooner-
            before I fell irrevocably in love with you?

Eyes can wander and minds can wander.
    But hearts aren't allowed.

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  • JaycobKay
    October 14, 2008

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    I like the concept of this and you've got a good start. I would suggest a little internal, subtle rhyme. also "youR fingertips" and "madE eye contact"

    Something everyone can relate to
    Nice write.


  • greeny
    October 12, 2008
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    :)

    nice one...
    keep up!!