Falling fast asleep
my beautiful angel
for in dreams you come
holding your hand
gracefully i fall into your eyes
Kiss me i whisper..
take me away
to where we use to go
a land full of stars
moments that reach the night sky
keeping you close
your tags held to my heart
i want you back
all of you not part
I know i messed up
one can only dream so much
but when does dreaming turn into reality?
i want you, all of you
I owe you forever
and forever i will give
please forgive me
let me take that hurt from your eyes
let me take you away...
let me love you..
whats the word
Comments
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The beginning of this poem is very nice and tender. The last two stanzas are much less poetic. They are in more of a conversational tone, perhaps revealing the desperation you feel for your lost love. "moments that reach the night sky" is a lovely phrase.
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I just love this poem. It flows very well. And says a whole lot. It makes me feel a whole lot of emotions some sad... some worse than sad... heart-breaking. You wrote this very well. Very good job!
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Loved the lyrical quality, beautiful flow -- but, IMHO, the line "know I messed up" just stops the musical quality. I wish you could say this another way, i.e., "know I failed you.." or "mistreated" or ? "Messed up" is so out of character for the rest of the poem, which I love!
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wow, let me be the FIRST to say that this poem was well and truley amazing!!!
i love the writing style, it was neat and orderly, it was meaningfull, sad, although empathetic. 100% pure poetry!
im sorry, im a lover of beauty in all its forms!
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