You spoke
waved silently
and
left.
I
floated
above.
No
signs
just
mad desire.
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Just a magical tone and the wonderfulflow to depict the story of this life..love the immageries as well..thanks for sharing..
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lovely
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Nice job. I like the flow of this one. Very short, very simple message. Very well composed.
Mike
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Nice and simple. You didn't get too carried away after all.
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Very good and elaborate yet so smooth!
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havent been here for awhile. its good to see that yuo are writing. Yuo did a great great job on this. I had some changes in my life just trying to deal with these. But will be back to writing sooon.I have a few pieces locked in this mind. Lol. But this was good. And it sort of convyed the feeling Im feeling. It touched the heart.great piece. will talk soon to you.
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I agree, you conveyed a lot of emotion in this short piece. It's so nice to come back and see that you're still writing! I really liked the last line as well.
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Great to see you writing again. I liked this. It was brief yet full of emotion, emotion I find I relate to very much.
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Melphleg, I have a question for you if you don't mind. Does expression of emotion constitute poetry? I have shared almost none of my poetry with people in 'real' life because I have always felt ashamed of it- like it really is not 'real' poetry under scruinty.
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