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look. look at me, tell me what you see. do you see a person, a freak, or a fiend. what do you see when you look at me. tell me, dont sugarcoat it. use the harsh words that will cut so deep, make me bleed. i want the hurt from you, i want the pain. take the knife and twist it in deep. i cant feel it anyways. all there is, is numbness. so tell me. tell me all my faults. bring up everything wrong with me. scream it right in my face. scream till my ears bleed. remind me how i have no one. remind me how no one really cares. i know it all. i know im so alone so why not kill me. you cant hurt me anymore thats already been done. get the bat, get the knife. use whatever you can, to try to make me feel. the whips, the chains, it doesnt hurt anymore. keep beating, until im gone. until im nothing. now, look at me. look at me, now tell me what you see. a person, a freak, or one of your sick masterpieces.

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Written January 26th, 2004

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    February 20, 2004
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    This is very good and descriptive.I liked it a lot.I can see everything happening.I liked the way you descrbed people to be and what you wanted them to beat you up with to remind you of pain, even though you were nimb at the same time.Very nice!!!The last line kicks ass!!!
    ~COOKIE~