I lean against hopelessness,
tear down the differences
between light and dark,
visualising beaten blames
and broken vowels
calmly comforted by the colour
of failure.
And I remain here,
strangely understanding
how things were...
how they would be
and suffering shows itself
completely.
Despite perplexity
and rage
I react to the pain
embedded in my soul
and the enormity of taken paths
winds its way
inside salty concerns
but victory has vanished
and hope lies not in hindsight
and makeshift meanings
no longer hold malice
against twisted hearts.
I am restrained
only by your feigned feelings
that long ago lamented
our repented mistakes
and I loiter limply,
like a poster
stripped of its purpose,
as you burn in the glory
of ill-gotten gains
whilst whistling the woes of others
along your ancient road
of yellow moons.
I exhale my disbelief
in silent screams,
for dignity is as quiet
as it is loud
and pride's shroud of you
has crumbled
upon the hearth of ever-gone
as love dies...
and leaves its shadow
against the backdrop
of your demise.
Author notes
The title may yet change, so suggestions would be welcome. Thankyou.
A contest entry
- Fresh As A Flower (No Prewrites) by HereComesTheSun.
450 points, ended October 26, 2008, 14 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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You have such wonderful imagery throughout this piece... this details heartbreak vivdly, the reader can feel the pain as if it was them.
"silence's screams" sounds awkward to me, perhaps "in screams of silence" or "silent screams"
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I used the second suggestion...thankyou
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this is so deep. i love the word choice...
and pride's shroud of you
has crumbled
upon the hearth of ever-gone
as love dies...
and leaves its shadow
against the backdrop
of your demise.
my favorite lines. .
-eleno
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wow
the best poem iv read in a very long time
all was superb and i enjoyed every word, great job :] -
I love how you can take the reader to the meaningful depths of your poem while writing in such a way that it is understandable and relatable, but not completely obvious. That is what makes you one of AP's best writers. This poem is a perfect example of what I am talking about. From pain to profound imagery, you have blended both perfectly.
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This is very well written!! You did a superb job!! I love it!!
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a poignant poem rich in imagery of deep emotions tinged with sadness, life uses such tools to take us to other destinations, so true and this is the affirmation here, a road yet to be traveled, lessons armed with lessons that have been learned. Excellent writing, strong use of imagery...PK
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