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One Willow

behold
thine hardened heart

befall return
limbs long
to thee embark

 

one weeping willow


roots through soils
of a thousand rains

 

 

A contest entry

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  • Glasyalabolas
    October 13, 2008

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    This piece reminds me of depression, the imagery of the willow and the thought of it being so deep rooted. Very solemn but beautiful.

    Good write.


  • JinSays gold member
    October 12, 2008

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    Ahhh! NOW THIS is gorgeous! Definitely one for the okay I forgive you for all the other stuff I had to read catagory.
    Damn it, but this is gorgoues, did I say that? If it doesn't win this contest, let me know, I'll give it an award.
    Much love,
    jin


  • Cannonsfire
    October 12, 2008

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    This makes me feel the person needs another to bend rather than steel themselves against being hurt...take a risk and love than not and stay lonely. C

  • Topnotchsy
    October 12, 2008

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    Really like this piece. It's short, but the imagery is strong. Nice write. Best of luck in the contest.


  • misticmoonlite gold member
    October 12, 2008

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    beaurifully old poetry type

    love the old english of nature,as it thrills the roots of poetry, thank you for this nice entry, good luck
    Linda

  • She Stole My Voice
    October 12, 2008

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    Hmm.
    This is great.
    I usually hate nature poems
    because they're repetitive but this is fantastic.
    Good luck in the contest ♥

    -Mary

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