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The Vortex

 

 

The vortex looms overhead
spinning psychotic melodies
of vague emptiness.

Out of the dim western sun
arise the anointed and brave
barristers of mighty power.

 

Slowly creeping towards upheaveal

they puncture the hollow sphere

of reason and intentionality.

 

A sole figure sobs and moans

heaving streams of sorrows' sighs

baring heart to heaven.

 

Lost and pining in the willows

she seeps tears for the masses ~

lost humanity wavering in the shadows.

 

Her children shun her presence

and twirl in merriment at the whim

inside the looming vortex.

 

The mighty men turn tides of venom

toward her meager abode

enveloping her now in turmoil and terror.

 

From whence does the answer come?

From which direction does it glance at her?

From what deep secret will it emerge?

 

She weeps for you and me.

She intercedes in humility and faith.

She has the only answer.

 

She will survive this ordeal

and populate a new heaven

and a new earth

 

as the vortex

recedes

eternally. 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Author notes

 thelordreigns

 

 

"Behold, I will create
 new heavens and a new earth.
The former things will not be remembered,
nor will they come to mind."   
~ Isaiah 65:17

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This is a poetry response to one of my favorite poems by William Butler Yeats. 
 
The Second Coming

Turning and turning in the widening gyre
The falcon cannot hear the falconer;
Things fall apart; the centre cannot hold;
Mere anarchy is loosed upon the world,
The blood-dimmed tide is loosed, and everywhere
The ceremony of innocence is drowned;
The best lack all conviction, while the worst
Are full of passionate intensity.
Surely some revelation is at hand;
Surely the Second Coming is at hand.
The Second Coming! Hardly are those words out
When a vast image out of Spiritus Mundi
Troubles my sight: somewhere in sands of the desert
A shape with lion body and the head of a man,
A gaze blank and pitiless as the sun,
Is moving its slow thighs, while all about it
Reel shadows of the indignant desert birds.
The darkness drops again; but now I know
That twenty centuries of stony sleep
Were vexed to nightmare by a rocking cradle,
And what rough beast, its hour come round at last,
Slouches towards Bethlehem to be born? 
 
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"Behold, I will create
 new heavens and a new earth.
The former things will not be remembered,
nor will they come to mind."   
~ Isaiah 65:17
 
 
 
 

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  • A floatingleaf silver member
    November 3

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    A hellish battle this is, both horse and rider spinning in the same direction. Who shall outlast the spin and win this hellish battle?

  • Wow, I have no criticism. Well done. Good luck in my contest.


  • Swan song gold member
    January 13
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    it is very difficult to be critical of a poem written this well.


  • Draig aine gold member
    January 4
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    the turning of the screw

    the eternal vortex, well done,


  • BonnieQ silver member
    December 31, 2008
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    Yep, as I said in my review of this one back when another gold winner. Wonder how many gold trophies our hostess can come up with.

    Luv ya, SisBon


  • wingsofgold25 silver member
    November 18, 2008
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    Thank you for your entry to the contest.
    Good Luck


  • Bean Sidhe silver member
    November 6, 2008
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    Thank you for your entry & good luck!


  • just mercedes gold member
    October 14, 2008

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    Thank you for this entry to the contest, and a wonderful poem written in response to the prompt.

    Your title works well for me, the echo of the gyre of the falcon and the cyclic motion of time.

    You present very powerful images, with a message of hope for the continuance of the world as a new heaven, a new earth. I love the triplets, echoing the trinity. My favourite stanza is the fifth, and the use of the willow, symbol of death but also resurrection. A very fine poem.


    • thelordreigns gold member
      October 14, 2008
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      Thank you so much for the kind review and the inspiration to write this poem.

  • BonnieQ silver member
    October 14, 2008

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    AWESOME !

    You have such an exquisite gift from our Father, dearest Sis. This poem is more than awesome, so I was stumped for just the right adjective. LOL! A gold winner, a gold winner.

    Indeed, there are those who weep for the lost and pray for those souls; and, yes, she will be one among those populating the new heavens and new earth. Such a marvelous event to which we may look forward with antipation and joy.

    Much love and hugs, SisBon


  • trueasagrayrose
    October 12, 2008
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    great write! i read it a few times and it painted a good picture in my head. =] ♥


  • hawkeslake gold member
    October 12, 2008

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    So powerful and colorful, great images, and an amazing response to Yeats. Definitely worth a second and third read, which I have done. Touches something deep inside. Thank you for sharing


  • dabpunx
    October 12, 2008
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    yes the blackholes are interesting. it is the epic battle entertaining us all.


  • ladyhelenaofsorrows
    October 12, 2008

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    absoluely brilliant!

    i really loved this, and they way it seems to fade at the end,it's very deep.good luck in the contest, tho i think you really won't need it with this, it's amazing!


  • princessleejwctlvr2
    October 12, 2008
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    this is very different!! You did a good job portraying it though!! A very excellent write


  • Syrenn
    October 12, 2008

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    this is a wonderfully written response poem with a tough concept to wrap your head around. You did beautifully. Very nice work.


  • The Fun House silver member
    October 12, 2008

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    Very strong. From the first lines you had me with this piece. It is profound, well written, flows beautifully and really makes an impact on the reader. Phenomenal work here.

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