The true majick of Blue Rew starts as seed,
Takes root in our hearts and weaves delicately .
We are nurtured by her hunger to know the soul,
Of the one true self in collective energy overflow.
She's well studied in the ways of nature's laws,
That one unrelenting truth born out in us all.
That every thing in existence is birthed alive,
And every rock and tree has a story to be derived.
Our Susan knows the circle is of infinite life.
And all is connected and dependant to survive.
That genuine kindness of spirit raises the bar,
To our spirit's higher octave in mystical charm.
The Sacred Feminine lives in her kindred heart,
It's woven in rich penned brocades she imparts.
Blue Rew has a focus I so envy and adore.
Diving fearless into depths of the poet's lore!
by Suseann
A contest entry
- The Alluring Aura of Blue Rew by j i n.
1654 points, ended October 27, 2008, 7 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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My life has been so enriched by the feminine strength and sheer energy of Blue. I spent so many years apologizing for being a weak female. With Blue and her majick, she's inadvertantly given me the determintaion I need to say yeah, and so what if I am? I still have so many things to offer this world, weaker sex, or not.
You've touched upon so many wondeerul things about Blue, I thank you for taking the time to enter this special contest,
Jin
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Thank-you my dear friend...
This speaks to me on inner levels.
I love the reference to brocade and
to the sacred feminine as I'm sure
you knew I would. You are truly my
most loyal reader. I'm so happy you
feel I've earned some of that loyalty
by sharing nature's laws.
Blue
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A kind tribute
The poem itself has some delightful moments such as birthed instead of born, the adcamp majick another.
But in the next to last line I can tell you are ill sweeting, it is much contrived, where as your others stand on their own. Your last line is you pulling out in strength. you might try in true kindness of spirit she doth raise the bar, and The Blue Rew has focus, I both, envy and adore.
Love you, The True Asp is back!
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Thanks for reading and attempted advice Ann. And you are right in that I'm not up to snuff to put it mildly. Unmetered? Yep! And maybe not to the readers ear,the best choice of word use,it's true. However,to change the lines message,would diminish its message intended. I know Blue,and knew she could understand what I'm saying there. I might return to it one day to rework it a bit. But not really up to revisions right now. Thanks Ann,you alway have my heart,you know that.
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