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Sea of dreams

Lost in a sea of dreams
being thrashed by the unrelenting waves
washed up from the sea on the beach of life
still alive another day, to face a sea of dreams
that have seemed to have gone away

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  • Astaraelneth
    October 12, 2008
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    I like it! Make it longer-I want to read more hehe


    • voicekp
      October 16, 2008
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      thanks for your advice. I'll work on it.