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See the sun.

    I dream sometimes of a soul locked in a second,
you wanted to see the sun forever, didn't you?

You got your wish granted - how come you're crying? 

A contest entry

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  • Paloszoo gold member
    October 15, 2008

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    Ending this piece with such a powerful question is very effective. Well done, poet. I enjoyed this! Thanks so much for entering my contest. Be proud of your work! It’s an honor to have it shown here!


  • arnica karuna
    October 15, 2008

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    This proves that quality matters more than quantity. very beautifully expressed and a very nice idea. Loved it. specially the imagery you've used.
    Cheers!

  • imoutyo
    October 15, 2008
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    brief and effective


  • Saint Irial
    October 14, 2008

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    We search and we find, once found things generally become a dissapointment. Poor creature.

    Brilliant write.


  • Commodore Rouge
    October 12, 2008

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    Dang, for 30 words --which I find very difficult-- this was stunning! Poetry is such a beautiful art, but when you articulate a great message and/or thoughts within a certain amount of space, I think that's when the read talent shines through! Good luck in your contesto!


  • kermie4201
    October 12, 2008
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    Wow

    Short and sweet, but still effective. i dig this.

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