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No One

Forced to put on a happy front
Unable to do what I really want
Unable to scream in terror and fright
Unable to do what I feel is right
Free will vanishes into thin air
Pretending as if I really dont care
Dont they see the pain I hold
The anger and hurt thats turning me cold
Dont they see my fears
Hiding behind these broken tears
No one knows what's going on in my mind
Even then would they like what they'ld find?
So far everyones run away
Is anyone willing to stay?

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  • Not-The-Sun
    August 4

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    great write something everyone can relate to. It reminded me of the lines "I don't want the world to see me, cause I don't think that they'd understand" from the song Iris by the Goo Goo Dolls. Oftentimes I want to pen something like this but I can never find the right words. But it seems as though you found them Bravo!


  • Antebellum
    July 27
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    This is a piece I feel many people can relate to. Its something so many go through, and to me thats the best kind of write.
    thanks for entering.


  • Ginger Woods
    December 9, 2008

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    I usually don't like rhyming, just because It's so hard for people to do, and sometimes the word's there forced to use don't add meaning to the poem, or even fit, yet your poem is very well written even with rhyming. Thank you for your entry, and goodluck.


  • Miss Chievous
    November 23, 2008

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    I absolutely love this!

    I think it is perfect the way it is!
    I enjoyed the ryhme!
    Good Luck!!

  • kb682436
    November 14, 2008

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    I love it.

    I love it. I have felt this way many times; having to fake a smile when everything really isn't right and unable to do what I really want and how others can' see what is really going on, hoping someone will stay and help. I love the rhyme. Thanks for sharing. You really put your emotions into it, and it really affects the reader. Just know -always look on the bright side and believe in yourself, and live life and be happy


  • XxMeaganxStrangexX
    October 28, 2008

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    Everything I've never been able to say...

    I really liked this...this is really how I feel, this is making me cry, my god...

    Would it be alright is I posted this on my blog as and give credit to you? This is just really...everything I want them to hear.


  • afullmetalwar
    October 24, 2008

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    …

    We all wear masks in this world,
    it is what behind the masks that are our true feelings
    John Donne said "no man is an island, onto himself"


  • saints and martyrs
    October 23, 2008
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    pretty good

    There was one typo(they'ld should be they'll) other than that I liked it.


  • Hikari Lady
    October 23, 2008

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    We all put up face every now and then, the world is a place where you can't experess your emotions to eveyone who lives in it. Just believe in yourself, stay strong and you'll pass... A powerful poem you have here, it got so many emotions and spoke to me. Thanks for sharing!

    ~Noor

  • Astaraelneth
    October 12, 2008

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    Amazing

    I SO know how you feel...this poem really spoke to me, I feel like that almost everyday. Everyday I have to put on a face when really inside, I'm not okay but that's life lol hopefully it'll get better soon. Anyway-don't change a thing! keep it up

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