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Last night,
you touched me
with you soul.


Your silken voice
seduced me,

passion reduced me.

Across

the night sky

as soft as a kiss

 

came you.

Whispering quietly

in my head.

 

Besieged,

lost in salt and musk,

arousal of unbridled lust.


Thigh to thigh,
hip to hip
in heated frenzy we slid.

 

Many

a lover

have I had,

 

dancing naked

on my bed,

but you! oh you...

 

how

they pale

in retrospect.

None
not one,
pierced me as you did.

 

Now,

it's morning,
you are still here.

 

I still smell

and taste

your seed.

 

I see your eyes,

feel your beard,

kisses down my spine....

 

still linger

quickining my

mind.

 

wheeling

whispering words

that only we can hear.

 

Ah,

love,

remember me

.
as slowly,

regretfully

rise I



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My love.....you are my passion....my desire..........

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  • Oh the lust of this poem, the beauty ohh it was all so wonderful
    Favorite lines
    "Your silken voice
    seduced me,
    passion reduced me."

    ~Serenity

  • Bruce silver member
    February 14
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    This is breathtaking!


    • Draig aine gold member
      February 14
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      ah yes

      but I got sidetracked by my dreams and wrote as a woman to a man, now I have to try to find the other point of view, care to help???

      • Bruce silver member
        February 15
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        I'd love to. BTW - this is a poem that improves with acquaintence - I liked it even better the 2nd time around!


  • Dark Otter
    February 13

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    This is hot!

    I'm guessing who did this. It has a stye that I'm familiar with. ...Oh well! Back to the critique. Good free verse with an imaginative concept that appeals to the judge's lecherous mind. I think I'm in love! It passes the erotic test.

    • Draig aine gold member
      February 13
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      oh my dear

      I am blushing beneath my mask!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

  • The D O M
    December 19, 2008

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    Very warm and sensual!
    I love the feeling this leaves, definitely a love poem


  • Pure Thought silver member
    December 6, 2008

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    ...and laying one upn the other they were immortalized in stone or the perfect love they made.

    Great images and thought this created.

    • Draig aine gold member
      February 15
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      My humble thanks

      and thank you for your most lovely comment!!

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