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Brilliance Of The Night

 

 

 

 

Dried up tears

Fading Fears

I was once lost but now I'm found

To death, I'm no more bound.

Trusting you

Tasting you

Keeps me alive

Alive and strong

To you I owe,

This unknown feeling that I feel tonight.

 

I thank the night for capturing you

You'll always be mine

Because you now dwell in my home

My safe home of the night

 

Sharp-edged stones

Decayed bones

I was once lost but now I'm found

I'm now on stable ground.

Holding you

Embraced by you

Keeps me alive

Alive and strong

To you I owe,

This enchanting feeling that I feel tonight.

 

I thank the night for capturing you

You'll always be mine

Because you now dwell in my home

My safe home of the night.

 

I promise that you're not under a spell

I promise that this isn't hell

This is where you belong

In my home, where I dwell

In the brilliance of the night.

Author notes

My own song Lyrics.

Picture Credit - http://i218.photobucket.com/albums/cc122/kai-kid/Love/beautiful.jpg

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  • albinoblacksheep720
    December 7, 2008
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    Ooh...

    I like the flow and mood you're setting here. I like it alot. Great job Good luck


  • FloridaGatorQueen silver member
    November 14, 2008

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    This is very beautifully written. I could feel the love for which this poem was written with. It was so romantic. I enjoyed the read!!! Thank you for entering my contest


  • trekkergirl
    October 23, 2008

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    I like this. I like the flow very much and I think the words that you repeat in the poem works well in it. I also think that you use imagery well in this poem. And I also believe that your picture adds a lot to the poem as well. Thanks for entering this contest. Good job


  • KyleBerg gold member
    October 16, 2008
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    So sweet and lovely!
    A comment wouldn't do justice to this.. it's extraordinary =)


  • Jesann gold member
    October 14, 2008

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    Wow!! This is great!!!!
    Love the lines "In my home, where I dwell In the brilliance of the night"


  • Reptile Lady gold member
    October 13, 2008

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    Brilliance fits the brilliance of the night.
    A beautifully written piece.
    The feelings flow
    Best wishes in the contest hun
    Julie


  • Nephlim
    October 12, 2008

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    That picture is awesome

    I loved that the third stanza wasn't the same as, but was like the first stanza. The last line, and title of the poem, is lovely =]
    GREAT job
    diggin it majorly


  • MD Masroor
    October 12, 2008

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    I personally think that this poem has one of the best endings ever. Beautifully written, slow but vivid imagery, this poem has proven the fact that you are indeed, a darn good poet. Good luck in the contest!


  • Puppydog gold member
    October 12, 2008

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    THIS IS SO SWEET!!!!

    Your words hold such feeling, wonderful tender thoughts for the one you love.'s I especially love the words "I was lost, now I'm found" those sweet and emotional words are found the one of the most beautiful songs ever written- AMAZING GRACE_. 's


  • charmander13
    October 12, 2008

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    I loved this poem! The imagery is so rich and deep and the night is full of wonder and awe... Awesome!

    Keep it up!


  • Hikari Lady
    October 12, 2008

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    So pretty!! I can almost see the couple together, holding and loving each other. So much warmth, a change from your yesterday's poems. Best of luck in the contest!

    ~Noor


  • Lencio Rodrigues
    October 12, 2008

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    Great job!

    Wow! I am always curious when my attention is drawn to song lyrics written by poets here. I read it once and then again and then the third time, and then tried to create a tune of my own and right now I am wondering the tune to "your" song. You have done a fantastic job with this, the chorus lines are wonderful!

    Thanks for sharing.

    Love and light,
    Lencio

  • Bob Fox
    October 12, 2008

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    You know

    I have always said the music was meant to bring harmony, not misery. Sadly todays music is so sorry. But you have penned a pretty , joyous piece of music that we all can sing to.


  • November-Dani
    October 12, 2008

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    Very well done. I love it, its such a nice change from all the rape stories i have been reading this afternoon. To be held tightly and safely by a lover, this is wonderfully written. Thank you so for sharing.
    Dani.

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