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Country Linen


 
 
 
 
 

Out upon the drying green

 

  Green the grass and bright the day

 

Day’s production can be seen

 

  See the linen dance and sway

 

Sway ye shirts and starchy sheets

 

  Sheets that polka on the line

 

Line-astern of shifts in suites

 

  Sweet the scent of linen fine

 

Fine the weather’s fling and flout

 

  Flouting flapping clinging clean

 

Clean within and clean without

 

  Out upon the drying green

 
 
 
 
 
 
 

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Please see ea's column on "wreath" poems: http://allpoetry.com/column/2346469

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  • ea silver member
    October 23, 2008
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    I honestly can't decide which of these two wreaths I like the best. It's a toss-up for gold.


    • Mairi bheag gold member
      October 23, 2008
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      I am very honoured to have given you two worth considering. Thank you for the bronze.


  • paulcreates silver member
    October 13, 2008

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    I have the same memories that Lane had but having grown up in Alaska the laundry being hung up was most likely steaming in the cold air. Saturday was laundry day and we'd all be assured of those super air dried clean sheets stretched tight as a rubber band across our beds.
    Thanks for the mammaries, uh memories (fruedian).

    Paul


  • Dalaney gold member
    October 13, 2008

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    i hated laundry until now what this brought to mind was when my mother would sometimes hang our clothes on the line instead of drying them in the machine, and to this day, i remember the smell of my sheets and my tee shirts - just like sunshine and Borax it is nice to have good memories stirred up by you. The entire poem is light and airy and summery. Love, Lane

  • Yvette Champ gold member
    October 13, 2008

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    Sadly for me, I often read form poetry that is challenged by its form so that there is no fresh feel, simply the starchy stiffness of being confined by it. I say sadly for I wish I could feel differently for I am passionate about poetry and am only intentionally cavalier of its dismissal in the liberty of creativity if it is used as a weapon, to incite, etc.

    I find your formation refreshingly invigorating, liberating, nothing is compromized, it reads as naturally as the feeling of jubilliance feels at that point of a natural high. You have chosen a mundane theme and made it into a musical, your laundry is an all singing, all dancing cast that is set upon a stage with a glorious backdrop.

    I appreciate the craftsmanship needed to entwine the words at end line through to the beginning of the next so seamlessly, it flows like a Scottish Reel, the readers feet tap and even feel the call of the Highland Fling!



    Cleverly crafted, two poems that could stand alone inextricably entwined to dance as one.


    Kudos.


    • Mairi bheag gold member
      October 13, 2008
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      I seldom bother these days with formal poetry unless I am certain I can make it dance, and make the content come alive in such a way as the form doesn't dictate it.

      Hmm... a Scottish reel... well it would certainly fit the tune of the march "Highland Laddie".

      Thank you for a wonderfully complimentary critique. I appreciate it.

  • Judith Chandler
    October 12, 2008
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    It's light and airy like the laundry, a nice write.


  • sailor ptolema
    October 12, 2008
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    megustalo.

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    i can smell the clean sheets .


  • Peteskid gold member
    October 12, 2008

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    I enjoyed this and the form was so creative, i did one of these once...was not nearly as pretty a song nor lovely a melody as this one...'skid...


  • cricketjeff gold member
    October 12, 2008
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    Beautifully formed and presented, a wonderful song to sing

  • ea silver member
    October 12, 2008
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    Thank you for another freshly woven "wreath" - it's delightful.


    • Mairi bheag gold member
      October 12, 2008
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      Thank you, but I think someone ought to tie me down before I go too mad!

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