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Autumn Leaves (wreathed sonnet)

 

 

 

You silly, swirling, milling autumn leaves,

 

Leave off your flitting patter at my window,

 

My window-panes, my shutters, and my eaves;

 

Eaves-dropping at your scattering and winnow –

 

Your winnowing with wind-raked hull and must –

 

Must pitter-pat my senses with new sorrow;

 

For sorrow lengthens when the year is dust.

 

Dust-swirls that sweep my York-stone path tomorrow

 

With morrow’s whorls and berries’ jumble there,

 

Their crinkle and their crackle for the barrow;

 

I’ll barrow them away, good crop and tare,

 

And tear at them with rake and race and harrow!

 

This harrowing of wind and husks bereaves –

 

Bereft the trees – you milling, autumn leaves.

 

 

 

 

 

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Please see ea's column on "wreath" poems: http://allpoetry.com/column/2346469

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  • Nickelspring gold member
    June 22

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    I love this- its whimsical like flitting autumn leaves. This is so lovely and is why Im so interested in this particular pattern.
    Im a fan, dear
    K

  • A beautiful sonnet - skillfully crafted, a tapestry in words.

    Jem

  • A really great poem, Mairi. The form here is somewhat similar to Amera's shadow sonnet, but much more subtle and sophisticated I believe. Congratulations for hauling in the golden goblet. You surely deserved it and more.

    • Mairi bheag gold member
      March 31
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      Ah, now this is a poem I am proud of. Thank you, David.

      It's simply a sonnet which incorporates the elements of a "wreath" (see ea's column).


  • StormGoddess Greeters member
    October 23, 2008

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    What a piece, and so well deserving of the gold.
    I see we swept the board
    Congrats on your trophies!

    Storm


  • parenchma
    October 21, 2008
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    Made perfet sense to me. I just assumed it was the daft way you scots talk...


    • Mairi bheag gold member
      October 22, 2008
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      I'm daft, I'm a Scot, I talk. Making sense is another matter.


    • deercatcher
      October 21, 2008
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      Behave, crass owl! Why I am so impressed, it goes in my sunday go to meetin reatin file...

      Just a thought from a poser ignoramous. I seems the last line needs two more sylables describing leaves. Like swirling, lifted from the first line...

      • Mairi bheag gold member
        October 22, 2008
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        That's an interesting idea - making it the lone, twelve-syllable line. The whole is in iambic pentameter (which is the way I wanted it); I wanted the last line to wreathe round to the first, not to be too precise an echo of the first. Still... hmmm... food for thought...


  • Room without doors gold member
    October 20, 2008

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    Outstanding

    I liked the way you used repetition to build this sonnet which is unusual and full of unexpected details. I thought this was very original and fun to read. Best of luck in the contest.


  • cricketjeff gold member
    October 12, 2008

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    Joyous use of words to make music, poetry always ought to be n aural experience and this shouts out to be read.

    There are no better sonneteers.

  • ea silver member
    October 12, 2008

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    This is simply breathtaking. I am so pleased to find a "wreath" of autumn leaves to hang upon my lintel.

    • Mairi bheag gold member
      October 12, 2008
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      Thank you. The poem came together when I suddenly realised that it had to sound good, not necessarily make much sense.

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