There grew a pumpkin in the patch
of garden out behind the thatch
roofed cottage with the iron latch.
I brought it in and carved it out
to made a Jack-o-lantern stout
but cannot find its whereabouts.
I wonder where my pumpkin went;
did it run off or was it meant
for something not of my intent?
I smell a fresh baked pumpkin pie -
I bet its taste would make you sigh!
If I don't get a piece, I'll die -
Oh my, is that a pumpkin cake
warm from the oven? Goodness sake,
my mother sure knows how to bake.
A contest entry
- This is Halloween! by thorlorn thanatos.
400 points, ended November 23, 2008, 43 entries
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"If I don't get a piece, I'll die -"
this line break the taste of this poem, well, superb piece, liked the way you have express your self
a 8 to 10 year old child will do the same
Likeness, Age comparison, words,Beauty, Ideas, Thoughts,Title, level of poetry
these all contains 100 marks, and i will mark out of hundred to let you win
and you scored 65
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the poet of hearts and beautiful words
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Very fun to read, and is sure to keep the children laughing.
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This is a very good piece of poetry. It flows very well is fun to read and a really great halloween piece. Nice job.
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...and yousure know how to write a winsome poem!
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Oooooooh, so cuuute! I love, love, double love it! Its so cute and made me wonder what punkin taste like, not to speak of pie.
from what I understand, pie is a type of cake used to trow in people's faces and also your own...The punkin can't taste all that good when you just use it to trow it on others?
Best of luck!
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thank you for your cute poem, love Kiarna
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Smile
Mom knows best, though Jack O Lanterns are cool.
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Is really cute. And the mystery is solved. But I really loved the first 4 stanzas alone. You know I love spooky endings.
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Perfect! As delicious as any pie.
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Childlike and pitched just right.
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